Every word given careful consideration, something, I still struggle with. I enjoyed how you give the reader a glimpse into the mind and soul of the weary traveler, and the ache and pain of all those accumulated miles; told in a gentle, and almost loving way. And that last verse just fell on me, like a snow drift.
Nice work, Carl.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thanks so much for your kind comments. It is much appreciated. I suppose you know that I really look.. read moreThanks so much for your kind comments. It is much appreciated. I suppose you know that I really look forward to receiving some poems from you. We miss you on VerseWrights! Best to you as always.--Carl
Joy is cancelled by pain and the light by darkness. There is no easy resolution. Such is life. We live in a gray zone, neither black nor white. Some original collocations really life this poem: windblown wear, mug-warm hands.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
You nailed it, and you are truly appreciated for your perception and your nice words.
Thanks, MOON. I actually changed the title this morning to "Twilight." I kind of liked the idea that.. read moreThanks, MOON. I actually changed the title this morning to "Twilight." I kind of liked the idea that it is in the poem only metaphorically.
I was an English teacher (high school, community college) for forty years. During that time I taught writing, and often creative writing. In my retirement, I write, and work at cultivating a thoughtfu.. more..