If Only I Would Learn To Listen

A Rondelet for PoeticPiers "Introducing The Rondolet" challenge

 

 

 

It calls to me,

 

This, my kiss, of luminous light.

 

It calls to me,

 

This, my wish, by day unto night

 

Beckoning me, enticingly,

 

It sings to my soul.  Soul, be free

 

It calls to me.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Wow, the picture you posted with this lovely little rondelet is fascinating, Jeri! I could certainly identify the feeling of "free" with the water pouring down. (If you can't post your poem to the challenge, you may not have it "labeled" correctly. I contacted the site owner about a similar problem and had to mark "poem" in both categories in order to access it for the challenge.) :-) Sharon

[Michael X]

the spirited addictions that beckon, and soft thoughts filled with curiousness, that of muses and inspirations, when thought becomes
desire, and feelings take the form of passion that invokes liberty or
those things that set the heart adrift, beyond mere imagination,
but into the art of the craft, wonderful work :)

[Kiddx]

This is so wonderful, I like this a most wonderful write...Kim

[angelina neves]

"Soul, be free/ It calls to me." but don't worrie because your soul is arleady free, flying all over, covering the Earth! At least i can feel it in this side!
What a wonderful kiss! Lovely!

[Spoken]

deserving of a win for sure! simple words arranged in powerful ways proving you don't need big fancy lingo to write something that touches the soul!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Kudos for winning third place in the rondelet contest.

Sal

[Laura E. Aranda]

THIS IS SOOOOOOOO Beautiful
The picture frames it perfectly
Good luck in the contest
Cheers,lea
I just had to come back and reread it again and again! haha ....sorry

[Salvatore Buttaci]

A very good rondelet! It is so effective, this repetition of certain words, strong enough to carry a poem to the reader's delight.

Sal

[doreen cyr]

well written and said
doreen

[Laura E. Aranda]

Good luck in the contest. I love it! I just learned about Rondelets and this one was right on target! Cheers, lea

[angelina neves]

it is a beautiful "kiss, of luminous light"! wonderful!