Floor and open doors

Ever spot me in the club? smile and a blown kiss wink across the room.

Your the star of your own video,

that red shirt grips and struggles,

 those legs,

oh those legs, tell me how those black pants fit?

Walk through the bar,

blow a few kisses,

shake your body,

'this is my song!'




Spring from here to there, slapping your hips,

spinning, shaking, pumping those legs,

shaking,

twisting,

bouncing,

thumping, thumping, thumping,

pumping,

and always controlling.



You move between the rain drops,

your body moves with ever beat,

you spin with every lyric,

you wiggle your hips, than a finger.

You shake left,  than your sharp the right,

you roll slowly,

your hip's pop, spin than twist again,

your lips swipe the taste of an apple martini',

your smile, laugh, lips,

hips, thighs, eyes and moves..


From a drop to a spin,

from the spin to your bounce,

from a bounce to a spin kick twist,

to a wiggle, kiss, prance, spring,

you hit the floor,

twirl, whirl, jump,

thrust,

kiss,

pop and jump!


Take these hips,

slap,

grinning,

teeth sink your lips,

spins away..............

Author's Note

Effects of Vodka, Pills, and a song stuck in my head.


And I have yet to ever learn to dance.

Reviews

[Amila Jay]

Pretty cool :))

[Ruth]

This has feeling - tangible!
I can visualise...as well as feel the tension, description is really well woven here! xoxo

[Pax]

i really like the rhythm that fits to a dance music. i enjoyed reading this. great work.

[Sethnicity]

yeah.. you should put the accompanying music on this.. I like what was happening sounds like a real party starter, but the lyrics didn't materialize the actual beat sounds forced, and the repetition of you and from could be changed up a bit to draw more description of the primary character. Has some Tango, Salsa, mixed with Swing and big band... That even with a few usage slips (lines 1,17,20...) otherwise descent writing. I guess I was looking for more rhythm and flow for a dancing poem... Hope you don't mind the constructive critique.

[Southern Cross]

Turn up the music..We all want to dance to the beat of this poem..very well done . the flow the rhythm even the red color all sensual

[†Tracey†]

I did and I winked and then..well you know:)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

very lively and sensual poem! i loved reading this...xx

[afra]

wow i enjoyed the the dance ..lol.......keep writing

[Robbie~xoxo~]

The scene is set, the music plays...and I can feel the beat..

" your lips swipe the taste of an apple martini',
your smile, laugh, lips,
hips, thighs, eyes and moves.."~ Yes, this is how it's done! Nice write!

[Deandra Dawn]

Very good imagery...Makes me wanna get up and twirl, whirl, jump, thrust and kiss :)