Car number 67393

The current temp is 101 degree's

Sweat drips down the back,
shy,
sweat drips across the dark golden smooth and hair,
perfectly,
sweat drips, grips, shifts,
timed,
clings, ties, binds, the cherry and black poka dot skirt.....
glance's
Grey concrete that stings with a sun,
blue jeans,
grey small sweating skin, reflecting the pumping sun,
blue shirt,
skin beneath cherry and black spots,
those classes look sexy,
sweat drips......
please get in this car...

"101", says the aging Raider's fan,
Get in this line!!!
holding the local paper, charming in a withered way...
Please...will you get into this car?
"at least the car will have air conditioning"
Oh my god he is walking over here!!!!
another passing comment, as he searched for his glasses,
Are you looking at my poke-dots?
on top of that old a*s Raider cap.
If I shake my hips.
"oh look the train is coming, right on time,
would you slap you hands on them
now if I can only find my glasses"
and pull me right into those tight blue jeans?????

APPROACHING TRAIN,
I want to bite your  skin,
EXHALES,
I bet you taste like leather.
COOLS,
What do you think my skin tastes like?
SWEAT DROPS,
I see you looking,
SWEAT DRIPS,
my hips are sweating from your eyes..
COLD AIR SLAPS MY BODY!!!
just one glance,
HOLD S**T THAT FEELS SO GOOD!!
my lips want that leather!



Doors open, bodies pressing as twelve squeeze against three.
I only want one body pressing up against me,
The conductor takes the time to remind us, this train's central air is broken. WTF!!!
Yea, unbuttoned that shirt,
No seats,
I guess we are gonna need to stand here......
No air conditioning,
You like what you see?
Forty minute ride, nothing to do.....maybe.
I love what I see.............

Lights blink on and off,
tight grips,
People, eye's, attentions,
little nibbles,
on cell phones, ipads,
hands move across a burning skin in a burning car,
take off that BELT!!!
"So you can tell dat b***h, 'i aint need no help wit my kid'"
LIFT UP MY SKIRT!!!
"like I said to Tom, 'if you wanna spend the next nine months going blind in paperwork, settle', no, about 3"
OH MY GOD!!!
"that's why i never go to that there, their coffee is bad and staff is worse"
SLOW IT DOWN, OH MY GOD, OH,
Lights blink off, and stay off,
KISS ME YOU F****R!! OH GOD!!!!!
"well Jean told me they have they thought it was a 'facebook time line'"
OH CHRIST!!! OH, I HAVE A BOYFRIEND!!! OH MY F*****G TAP DANCING S**T!!!


People texting.
BODIES GRINDING!!!
people sleeping,
WHIMPERS, SLIGHT MOANING!!!!
"it sounds like one of those blind persons dog's."
SHAKING!!!
Load snores from nine rows back.
OH................YEA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"NEXT STOP, MIDWAY PLAZA"
sweat.....drips.....
"my stop"
than you walked out the doors,
dress......wet......
body....relaxed!!!

Author's Note

The video shall speak on my behalf to my reviewers.

Reviews

[Muse]

Okay...are you high? If yes...what are you smoking...I want some! Lol
you hijacked my senses in every Ferking way possible. Yes you got me hot...disturbed..annoyed...hot..so much so I could smell the leather and BO. I don't know what to say...you are mad....brilliant? 100

[Brittni]

Ummm.....wow! That's all I can pretty much say on here that is safe content.

[Baby Ricochet]

Great fractured images of desire baby. Loved it! Iggy was the greatest rock star in history. Some wierd sin is my life's theme song. Iggy and the Stooges funhouse was the greatest rock and roll record ever recorded.

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

OK - that you can tap into this stuff... this non-dialogue (and you get the female part way too well I might add) and then make a bit of sense of it - that's cool. But then you throw it down there ... with a whole bunch of other word salad... almost too real, oh! messy too for someone to walk by and make sense of. So I walk in, look down and start trying to take it in. And just as I want to grimace and walk away from reading it, I realize I can't. I'm hooked.... all the way till the very end. You are a word pusher! Redeemed because you are a very clever writer. And a little scary. Clever and scary. And totally unique. I'd tip my hat but it's photoshopped on.

[MoriartyMesa]

I thought the music worked wonders with this.

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Doh! Was I supposed to turn on the music? DO OVER!

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

DONE OVER and sorry for the many reviews but totally worth it. OK - ALL THAT UP THERE? It stands... but add to that add this song RIPS IT TO SHREDS! That was not a story! That was an ride along 3D full immersion. The polka dot skirt? Dude! You even know how to dress the girls. Photoshopped hat tipped.. twice!

[†Tracey†]

Yes it's hot and I only have one word.. yummy.. it has placed some nice thoughts inside this mind of mine lol ;)

[BlackRose]

It's good but I don't think I couldn't put something up like this. Needs a few few tweaks here and there but still good. I think like one said I might also need a shower. It would be like what they say what stays in Vegas but this one is not staying in Vegas, lol.

[Pax]

the fonts really reflects enjoying journey. a very unique way to enjoy a poem.

[Wondering Mind]

Quite the ride! Your ability to guide the reader to exactly where you want is noteworthy.

[Amelie]

I just so love the spunk in your style- exciting, equally novel and devoid of banality, and readers are frequently bamboozled by your utter brilliance of dark wit. This piece took me in a damn wild ride, Fear and Loathing in Vegas scenes as side dish.