To the gates of Elysium

The steps of Germania 16 A.D.

Step, Swing, Thrust, Cut, Repel, Step, Swing, Thrust, Cover.

Formation move to line!!

Step, Swing, Cut, Crush, Burn, Cover.

Formation move to line!!

Arrows, Spears, Thrust, Shield, Cover.

Formation move to line!!

Step, Swing, Thrust, Cut, Repel, Step, Swing, Thrust, Cover

Formation move to line!!

Calvary, Heavy, Light, Cover, Gain, Ground,

Formation move to line!!

Spear, Arrow, Sword, Shield, Cover, GAIN, CRUSH, DIVIDE,

Formation move to line!!

Kneel, Submit, Prostate, Be Shamed,

FORMATION MOVE TO LINE!!! 

Reviews

[Muse]

The bold letters...the dark font. All of it well done. Very appropriate since you are trying to convey a darker message, with a sense of importance and urgency. Solid rigid formation...the arrows...the shields...the spears...ready to crush some heads and fight. I loved it!

[The Twin Arenas]

It's blunt.

Made me feel dumb as post.

Germania 16 AD

[Matching Socks]

This is excellent! Perfect formations. Intensity is drilled in by the repetition.
The last line makes me giggle because of all the uncomfortable exams men endure. :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I love the repetition - it really brings out the tension that's visible in war.

[Ruth]

Impressive use of ink and deliverance...makes the reader feel tense and captivated! xo

[Quill~]

I agree with Muse, your bold letters make this stand out. The "urgency" in the throes of battle can be felt.
Good work!

[Kaylor Mason]

I wonder what the Romans would've thought of it. I don't think they ever knelt and submitted . . . the Roman Army wasn't really known for big surrenders (though they did get their arses handed to them on a plate once; deep within the barbarian German Forest. I can't remember the Germanic leader's name, though)

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Well...this is different, I think my son would like it.

[Kuhr Gred]

wow.. you're just dancing.. like it.. :) keep it up ;)