You Called The Thunder

For Whom do you blame?

The Gods?

The Furies of the Seven Winds?

Why do you anger the beast?!


His grunts, cracking of bones, muscle, backs and neck.

Yet you blame this simple beast?

You call him a 'Monster'

'Beast of the fields,

a mindless creature, whom should kneel unto you as if you were the Goddess Juno herself!

No glory in withdrawing quietly,

a martyrs crown is what you seek!

So,

For Whom Do we Blame?!

The Monster of The Mountain!

The Beast of Jungle Gaelic and Kelt blood!

Hear his mighty roar and bellow!!

Burn this beast of endless fields and mountains of the west!!




But His Skin is FIRE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

His Arms are as STRONG AS MOUNTAINS!!!!!!

His Legs are of the FIELDS!!!!!!!!!!!

HIS EYES!!!!!!!!!!!!!

EYES THAT SEE WHEN A TONGUE LIES,

ALWAYS, WHEN IT LIES!!!!!



He is a Mindless Beast!

A Savage!

Lumbering Hulk of Rage!

Primal!

But will not kneel to your 'thunder'

or lamentations.


But when enraged,

when endlessly crossed,

smells a false tongue...


WHEN YOU CALL THE THUNDER,

THE THUNDER STRIKES THE BEAST!

BUT THE BEAST GROWS STRONGER!!!!

STRIKE THE MONSTER!

SMIGHT HIM,

INVOKE ANCIENT GODS AGAINST HIM!!















do not tempt the beast,

or call your thunder,

it will only make him stronger..........





































I AM NO MAN

BUT THE BEAST OF THE FIELD,

AND YOUR THUNDER.......

tickles!!

Author's Note

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I didn't know we had to be perfect. I have 120 army shots in my body. My memory is bad. The 11 anthrax shots and 300 malaria pills left me making a few mistakes. I like the way you led the reader to the surprise ending. Thank you for sharing your poetry.
Coyote

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

reverberates through the bones~ and echoes down the skin like coagulant life! you sure do make the reader FEEL it!~

[EMF]

You've been watching me at work. Damn. You're the guy who sit's in the corner. The one who's nursing the coffee all afternoon. Damn. I should have known... Mind you... bloody good poem. And the ending... Hillarious.

[Kaylor Mason]

sounds like a trip to the dentist, just after he gives me a shot of novocaine

[Michael of Gilead]

I kinda like outta control stuff that makes me want to wrap my arms around skyscrapers and rip them from the ground....or it's the meth?

O & A, man you can't be wrong ;)

[Sirius King]

i like this, it invokes a lot of passion...good read and write

[brokenwing1986]

I think it is Brilliant on all different levels, This write is on new levels of enjoyment, I feel the rage of the hulk, The way you have used the words, A very good write. Keep writing, I like to see more.

[Pól]

As a true Gael, I was dismayed to see the terms "Gaelic" and
"Celt" ( note the correct spelling, a kelt is a spawned salmon) in this piece of claptrap masquerading as poetry

[MoriartyMesa]

Let me understand something, just for my own part. What is exactly your problem with my work?

[Pól]

On reflection I may have been unduly harsh for describing your "work" ( I use that term loosely)as "clap-trap". Clap-trap and garbage generally can be recycled to produce something worthwhile. Your "work" on the other hand, is totally devoid of any merit. As one of my close friends wisely noted just the other day your "work" is just one big cliche re-worked ad naseum. You are fortunate, indeed, that no-one has sued you for damages, as your "poety" (again I use that term loosely) has the unavoidable consequence of rendering the reader physically sick. I would ask you to desist from further "writing" immediately, lest you cause serious harm. This is not just my opinion, it is shared by a large number of writers on this site, who frankly have had enough of the vile rubbish you serve up.

[MoriartyMesa]

So what exactly are you asking me?

[Pól]

I'm sorry, what you should do could not be any clearer. Perhaps you should ask your mummy to explain? You need to know your limits, man. Your time would be much more gainfully spent in a pasttime that is not beyond your intellect, perhaps dwarf throwing or pig racing.

[MoriartyMesa]

Well you are more than welcome to set up a Petition.

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Wow - MM - way to take the high road on this one. I don't think I could be as kind as you have here.

[Pól]

Alas, that is not an option. No doubt unscrupulous people, for reasons of mirth, would flock to your defence, as a john sergeant figure.

[TwoWeekTwoMove]

Ahhhh... Egotism. You must be fun at parties Paulo. Rather than give an intellectually stimulating response to offer the one-letter correction you, instead, decide to have a cry-baby fit. Over something entirely inconsequential. Bad taste, poor form, and makes me think you might need a bit of anger management. I can honestly admit that I do not like the poem, sure. Is it a bad poem though? No. It is poetry and everyone has different tastes. Grow up, buddy. Take a chill pill while you are at it.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

Paulo, I've read way better poetry than yours on this site..you're only a thin sliver above cliche yourself, so quit telling people to stop writing and step up your own game...channel w/e you don't like about yourself intro better writing...the angry irishman? *yawn* c'mon dude...talk about cliche

[MoriartyMesa]

Well as the guy who started the whole mess with his words. I honestly have no idea what I did to piss Paulo off. I never claimed to be a great writer or even a good one. It just puzzled me when I first saw it, but my assumption was an attack like this was a way to get peoples attention to his own work. Which IMO is a little messed up, if he corrected my grammar or something to that effect I would be cool. But it just felt like the guy at the end of the bar who had one to many and picks a fight with a Gorilla for no reason, than finds out the Gorilla might not take kindly to insults.

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

See - there you go again. Being calm and taking the high road. No better response to a bully than that. Just makes them look daft - er. Dafter? Yes dafter. Hilarity here on this post. You missed a comma. (JK)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You comma vixen!

[MoriartyMesa]

Why John, such a nice comment, a Vixen, well yes i can agree there is something of the Vixen in my eyes, but i haven't washed my face yet. dont look at me im hideous

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Look at your stats now MM. He did you a favor. Send him flowers!

[EMF]

Out of curiosity, I scrolled down. Not for the first time today have I commented on the bollocks people talk on here. Not you MM, nor the rest of you, well, bar the first chap. Personally I love it.

[MoriartyMesa]

Oh, still waiting for the Petition Paulo

[EMF]

As a side note, I actually do know a professional dwalf throwee. It's his job. A trained athlete. A skilled professional. As are you MM. But if it encourages the twit to continue embarassing himself, Hell, I'll sign the petition. In Gaelic.

[KAOlmsted]

*laugh* I love drama ...oh wait. No I don't. Scratch that. A little to the left. There!

[Pól]

Dwarf thrower, EMF. A fine occupation, indeed, for the intellectually challenged. Glad to see I got y'all talkin. Being a gentleman KAOlmsted, I would be happy to... ahem... scratch that for you.

[KAOlmsted]

*ahem*

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey Paulo, never clear the sewer if you have someone to do it for you! failing that a stick of f*****g dynamite will do!

[Pól]

Have you written it yet?

[Pól]

LOl John. You misunderstand my motives. I am fond of MM and only trying to help. He reminds me of one of my dogs, Sophie, who, dumber than the rest is that much harder to train!. Shame on those unscrupulous types who insist on encouraging him for reasons of mirth.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Think I will give it some attention tomorrow. Fancy a dual approach?

[Pól]

Definately- the Celtic 2! Actually I understand that the Cafe's Health + Safety Department is also backing my case.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The Cafe has blocked sewers
that need to be cleared
it is full of thick turds
who have moist platitudes
to firm to its walls.......

[Pól]

brilliant John (as always)- but you will need to make it simpler , otherwise the target audience will be lost

[Clayton Bardwell]

I want to go on the record as being against dwarf throwing. But pig racing? I'll admit I've raced a few pigs in my day. I enjoyed it! They do make some noise so prepare yourself.

I liked the poem!!!

You didn't piss of Paulo, he came that way.

[Pól]

Can I suggest a name for your ballad, John; "S**t Rises" I have to go out for about an hour now, but hopefully that will have given MM time to think of some sort of clichéd response. Master of scintilating sarcasm and rapid repartee he ain't, I'm afraid

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Guys lets keep this happy and fun as we all have a view. maybe a side of the pond challenge?!!

[Pól]

Bardwell- what a great f*****g name for a poet!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Cracking name for an English Poet me thinks!!!

[Clayton Bardwell]

Many thanks kind sirs.

[Droll Prole]

I love the ending!