Dream

 

The sun goes down
It starts to darken
The harsh screams of hell start to grow louder
Silent songs of angels grow softer

The sky turns red
From all the blood shed
Everyone runs and hides
when the sun dies
all the demons come alive

lying there kicking and screaming
pleading them to let me go
they want me, they need me
I fight and fight

In one split second I sit straight up
crying on my bed
for it was just a dream

 

Tears in my eyes
Realizing it was no dream
It’s engraved on my heart
For it hunts me when I sleep

I cry for help
But no one can hear
I try to run,
But I can not move

I don’t want to sleep
It is there when I close my eyes
Nightmares of the future and the past
Haunt me till I die

Reviews

[Soul Poets]

One word Marvellous

[Sexy P3nguin]

Oh my God.

First I just want to say thank you for entering my contest.
Second this was an fantastic poem.
I feel the fear that that you were trying to portray. I seriously felt a lil scared.
Last my favorite stanzas were the following:
The sun goes down
It starts to darken
The harsh screams of hell start to grow louder
Silent songs of angels grow softer

The sky turns red
From all the blood shed
Everyone runs and hides
when the sun dies
all the demons come alive


The way you worded it was absolutely beautiful.
Again thank you so much

[The Lovely Sound Of Cra..]

Very strong and gripping...
It's good to see your writing after so long.

"Tears in my eyes
Realizing it was no dream
It's engraved on my heart
For it hunts me when I sleep "

The pain and mental torture is described well.

"I don't want to sleep
It is there when I close my eyes
Nightmares of the future and the past
Haunt me till I die"

It really makes the reader feel that hurt and fear.
Great write dear, keep doing what you do.

[Jazmyne]

wow this piece gave me chills.

I cry for help
But no one can hear
I try to run,
But I can not move

that really does sound like a dream......when you are stuck in it and you cant move or talk. it sucks when that in life you can go through the same type of dream....like a nightmare. you always seem to amaze me with your writting.

[Anthony J. M. Nelson]

A very vivid and intense piece... I can absolutly see and understand what your writing and I was emersed in the gripping fear that I think you were conveying. A great work sweetheart...

[None]

Reading this--it unfolds like a scary movie. Terror lived through your dreams is so well described here, my heart goes out to you. Just when I think the nightmares are over, they begin again. Very traumatic and you have a gift for expressing such emotions through poetry! I stopped on this line and admired your capability with this: "Silent songs of angels grow softer." Awesome imagination and a thrilling ending.