Chapter 1 The Begining

Xahort was finally defeated and Roxas became his own person
the world where all locked once again. Knowing that Roxas could never return
to his life with Hayner Pence and Olette because the world were he new them was fake Roxas returned to the true Twilight Town and locked his self in the Manchen and went down to the computer to try and recreate the Twilight Town where he was known.
Two years has pasted since then and Roxas Failed to create the Twilight Town but in his research and divalipment he stumbled
across a way to control the empty shells Called Nobody Roxas Diced he would Creat an Army if he couldn't return to his old Twilight Town mabby he could rule this one. suddenly there was a sound upstairs Roxas went into the wight room where he found and owl the owl was holing a envelope in its mouth Roxas took the envelope There was no address to or from written on it But there was the letter V on
the front of it Roxas placed the envelope on the table and went to grab a letter opener when suddenly Riku bursed throw the door shouting "Roxas I need your help!"Roxas stooped what he was doing and Approached Riku.

Reviews

[Silent Wolf]

Alright, so slightly confused, maybe because I haven't seen this anime.
1) Who is Xahort? Who is Roxas? Who is Hayner Pence? Who is Olette? Who is Riku?
2) I know you said that you weren't very good with spelling, so maybe I can help?
3) I know you said you weren't very good with punctuation either, so maybe I can help there too.
4) Maybe it's just me, but the paragraphing seems a bit off.
I don't mean to be critical. Usually when I review I put what is good and bad, and if there is questions I try to answer them. Usually when I criticize, I only do like Punctuation, fast paced, slow paced, detail, grammar, etc. I don't think I'm too hard. ^_^ But besides that, this is pretty good. ^_^

[MoonLight Ninja]

its not a anime

[Silent Wolf]

Oh ok. I thought it was. Sorry.