ROAR OCEAN ROAR

a sad Middle

I climb miles and miles of a thousand hills.

Each step of the way- a moment I stand still.

And look back to glimpse my will.

Hope of an olive skin woman among so many ills.

This truth feel like ashes,

None shall see soul stained lashes.

And when the sea trashes-

Who will run to gather life's pieces.

Too late into the night,

Blasting emptiness creep in sight.

Left with unlit candles- no light.

Roar ocean roar with might.

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this roar ocean roar
Beautiful

[Rose of many colours]

Thank you, appreciate you reading

[Sami Khalil]

I read this again. One of your best...:).....

[ANTO]

I loved the looking back to see your younger self Rose - a journey of self discovery magnificently written - the ocean roar is as thrilling as it is frightening and deafening. Great images. :)

[Rose of many colours]

Thank you so much Anto, It is as you say, I write only from experience. Your reading is an encouragement to start back writing again.

[ANTO]

Yes - do !! getting back to writing after a years break has saved my sanity I feel

[Susan Beth Horvath]

A remarkable piece! Your vocabulary is extensive and your phrasing is strong and confident

[Rose of many colours]

You know, that was an encouraging praise from you, Thank you so much for the review.

[Latifa]

Roar ocean roar with might.
powerful poem,I like the rythme flow to it
This truth feel like ashes,
None shall see soul stained lashes.
And when the sea trashes
nicely written,great job.

[Rose of many colours]

Thank you for your comments . God bless

[kublakhan27]

The sense of despair in your words is more than palpable...I love the middle stanza especially...great work Rose.

[Rose of many colours]

Thank you dear writer, I truly appreciate your sincere response. This is true life experience.

[Ian Gilmour]

This is well written and I like the idea of the climb as a symbol and the concluding line of the ocean roaring. The ocean is home to so much life and so much mystery that ending with the power of the ocean helps the poem with perspective while also creating awesome imagery.

[Rose of many colours]

Thank you Ian, When I wrote this piece, I was having an experience of being deserted. I went to the ocean and spent some time. And capture this piece with nature.

[Lyn Anderson]

This was sent to me by John Anderson -- an emotional piece, well done. Not sure why the end is a comma ... is that for effect? Middle stanza -- your scheme consistent except here -- you might want to consider reworking it.

[Rose of many colours]

No , it was not for effect. It was a mistake. thank you for the correction. But the middle stanza I have no idea what to do. I was writing an experience I was having and as the thoughts were flowing I just wrote. I will still consider what you said and try to polish it. Thank you so much for the insight and inspiration.

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem. It may come to you. It does that sometimes ...

[A. Amos]

Truly entertaing and compelling piece, good job buddy...

[Rose of many colours]

Thank you Amos for your response.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my dear....