ROAR OCEAN ROAR

ROAR OCEAN ROAR

A Poem by Rose of many colours
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a sad Middle

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I climb miles and miles of a thousand hills.
Each step of the way- a moment I stand still.
And look back to glimpse my will.
Hope of an olive skin woman among so many ills.

This truth feel like ashes,
None shall see soul stained lashes.
And when the sea trashes-
Who will run to gather life's pieces.

Too late into the night,
Blasting emptiness creep in sight.
Left with unlit candles- no light.
Roar ocean roar with might.

© 2014 Rose of many colours


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Love this roar ocean roar
Beautiful

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose of many colours

7 Years Ago

Thank you, appreciate you reading
I read this again. One of your best...:).....

Posted 9 Years Ago


I loved the looking back to see your younger self Rose - a journey of self discovery magnificently written - the ocean roar is as thrilling as it is frightening and deafening. Great images. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rose of many colours

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Anto, It is as you say, I write only from experience. Your reading is an encourage.. read more
ANTO

9 Years Ago

Yes - do !! getting back to writing after a years break has saved my sanity I feel
A remarkable piece! Your vocabulary is extensive and your phrasing is strong and confident

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rose of many colours

10 Years Ago

You know, that was an encouraging praise from you, Thank you so much for the review.
Roar ocean roar with might.
powerful poem,I like the rythme flow to it
This truth feel like ashes,
None shall see soul stained lashes.
And when the sea trashes
nicely written,great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rose of many colours

10 Years Ago

Thank you for your comments . God bless
The sense of despair in your words is more than palpable...I love the middle stanza especially...great work Rose.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rose of many colours

10 Years Ago

Thank you dear writer, I truly appreciate your sincere response. This is true life experience.
This is well written and I like the idea of the climb as a symbol and the concluding line of the ocean roaring. The ocean is home to so much life and so much mystery that ending with the power of the ocean helps the poem with perspective while also creating awesome imagery.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rose of many colours

10 Years Ago

Thank you Ian, When I wrote this piece, I was having an experience of being deserted. I went to the .. read more
This was sent to me by John Anderson -- an emotional piece, well done. Not sure why the end is a comma ... is that for effect? Middle stanza -- your scheme consistent except here -- you might want to consider reworking it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rose of many colours

10 Years Ago

No , it was not for effect. It was a mistake. thank you for the correction. But the middle stanza I .. read more
Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

No problem. It may come to you. It does that sometimes ...
Truly entertaing and compelling piece, good job buddy...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rose of many colours

10 Years Ago

Thank you Amos for your response.
A. Amos

10 Years Ago

You're most welcome my dear....

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Added on March 22, 2014
Last Updated on June 23, 2014
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Rose of many colours
Rose of many colours

San Fernando , Trinidad and Tobago



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Hello. I'm from the Caribbean,Trinidad and Tobago. Writing is my companion, it defines the person i am. 'My tongue is the pen of a ready writer' this is my favourite verse in the Bible. My expe.. more..

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