YOU

Feelinngs I have, wanted to express my self.

You made me happy

you fill me plenty

you made me sad

you have me bled

you made me cry

you had me sigh

You did all this

with a twist.

 

You did rhyme

you took my time

you gave some prose

you had me froze

you read my mind

You made me sublimed

you did all this

with a gist.

 

You channelled my course

you made me a force

You gave me dreams

you had me in in beams

you made me write

you wronged my fright

you did all this

with a list.

 

To my writers friends God Bless.

From moonera.

 

Reviews

[MichaelsLyric.com]

Nice tribute to friends, writers. There is a hint of sarcasm, though. This piece has a clever structure and a tight rhythm. Strange enough, I was just thinking about posting a piece that was inspired by someone from Trinidad. This is a great piece. Thank you for sharing.

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks for the comment, great writer, nice to meet you, when you post it will you let me know,I would love to read, Have a wonderfull evening and God bless you..

[Tennessee]

Good shout out to your writer friends. It tells the story of all friends at one point in a friendship. Very accurate. Sick.

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks Tennesse that one is for you as well,, god bless great writer

[jacob erin-cilberto]

writers need to support each other even more than they do...

sometimes we get into petty fights, ridiculous melees...and all we have most often is each other...so that is crazy.

this piece really flows so well...very much enjoyed the reading.

my folks lived for three years in Point-A-Pierre" in Trinidad..

i visited them a few times...we went to Tobago for a few days each time...lovely there.

[Nativespirit]

Courage, dreams, come to the van when supported by friends who know.

Keep writing.

[Rose of many colours]

God bless you great writer..

[Joyce S. Greene]

A wonderful tribute to your writer friends, Rose. I enjoyed the read very much.

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks Joyce that is for you God Bless you always..Dear writer

[Dhaye]

Wow! This is wonderful, Rose. I like the rhyme scheme and the structure.
Sometimes, though there are many people around us, only one person can affect us in many ways- the one that we love the most.

Superb!

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks dhaye. That this is for you who make the difference. God bless great writer.

[zainul]

A fabulous piece.
You wrote on behalf of me and many others.
We stand by the blessing and support of each other.
A great writer like you can express the feeling so frankly.

[Rose of many colours]

I understand where you are coming from Zainul. But people like you in writers cafe make a write complete and alive.I am new to writing for others to see.And I am amazed by the comments you all gave. I was not aware that I possessed this an extraordinary gift.When I read the poems of other writers On this site I am motivated to write as well.. God Bless you great writer.

[zainul]

Thanks for the generous compliments.
The writers of this site made us aware that we have poetic gift.
I feel very glad to know that you became aware of your possession of extraordinary poetic gift.

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks Dear friend and writer..I feel lifted up by your thoughts.. If I were a bird I would Fly.

[zainul]

This is great reward for me.
Last night I watched a wonderful documentary on the landscape and wildlife of Trinidad and Tobago in Discovery channel.I saw beautiful birds in it.I feel quite warm by the presence of spirit of Moonera around me that came flying as a bird.
Thanks for the lovely gesture,dear friend.:)

[Rose of many colours]

You are welcome. Great writer

[zainul]

This is a real pleasure for me.
Thank you Moonera for the lovely gesture.

[WILDERNESS]

Sweet and sublime.................... like rain fall...........v nice

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks wilderness for being supportive to my write .Just wante to appreciate you..God bless.

[Coyote Poetry]

I get motivated to write by other writers. We need people to give us purpose and direction. I like your description in the poem. I like the flow of thoughts and the ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks Coyote Poetry, I wanted to appreciate you for the many positive feed back for my write. You are my motivation to write and keep on writing.As well as others true writing friends.. God Bless you. great writer..

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

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Smilessssssssssssssss:) love it Moonera:) sweet sweet sweet!

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks Jon. You all are wonderful people too..

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Smiles:) :) :)

[Rose of many colours]

Hey Jon you wrote a poem to young lady way back" A broken Writer", well maybe you don't know this but I was one of them who was broken with heaviness of heart,So I read that poem so often I was revived to write.. I wanted to appreciate your kindness and others as well..

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That makes me smile,I am glad it helped:)

[Rose of many colours]

You are wecome My friend...