WHERE I HIDE MYSELF

I had a need to hide my self from negative people and their criterism.

I hide myself in old rusty drums of speeches

 In thoughts that travel with the wind

 In muses of ancient ruins

From whispers of voices so dark

I hide myself in places not to be found.

 

I hide my pain among heavy raindrops of laughter

 In the chemistry of different smiles,

In old dried up, broken cisterns

Among stars that look alike

From insults of rotted fruits and withered trees

I hide myself to be lost to you.

 

I hide my sadness when the light is out in the tunnels of freedom

 In the desert storms of a blistering mind

 In the dark where the moon crowns the sky

Among thorns and thistles where snakes do climb

From the thrust of burden some words

I hide my self where you can’t find me.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

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I love it, yes I understand it all to well and I love the metaphors you used fit very well:)

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks so much this one was wrung out from my heart. I strongly believe you understand..

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Welcome yes I understand:)

[Rose of many colours]

People understand when they have been through the same..

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Yes now go rest no more reply lol, you need rest!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Splendid presentation of emotion here, Rose. There was a time in my life that I have to hide in seclusion. I just want to be alone and reflect...and heal myself. Some people are really critical and sensitive people like us can be affected inside. But still, God brought us those people who could help us stand and move on.

I can relate to this. Thanks for the share. Nice word choice and structure. Keep going.

[Rose of many colours]

You are so right.. I believe we will face this all our life.some times I want to run away from it all. But I must Grow in it and move on..Thank you for reading

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome.

[Cassie]

You are such a good poet, I do not know why I have not been reading your work, I love what am reading, it is not so good to hide the pain so much also, if you get a shoulder, let out, it is always good to let out all the pain.

[Rose of many colours]

Yes I know. But it is hard to get a good shoulder to let it go. So I write my feelings away. Every where I turn sometimes I receive Negatives about meself especiallly with the people who I come in contact with on a daily basis.So I just give up..Thanks For appreciating my write. You give me joy, what more can I ask for. Bless Your soul..

[Cassie]

Thank you, writing is the perfect remedy. It works for me a lot

[Rose of many colours]

Hey you are great you know that. I am blessed to meet you..

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I like what you said Cassie, the reason is Ecc3 :) There is a time for everything under heaven and guess it was one them times:)

[AYVID N]

An awe-inspiring picture drawn of troubled human psyche. Troubled by the negativity, the rot and the darkness. The imagery is breathtaking and you use it to create superb visuals in this poem. I look forward to reading more work of a poet as fine as you.

[Rose of many colours]

Thanks for the review, much appreciated. but I an a virgin to this sort of things.Use to write when I was a little girl and trow them away after. Now I have some where to put them..And I am encouraged by the reviews..

[Sami Khalil]

"I hide my sadness when the light is out in the tunnels of freedom

In the desert storms of a blistering mind

In the dark where the moon crowns the sky "

Amazing how you weave words and imagery at the same time. This was soooo good...Thank you for penning...:)

[Rose of many colours]

Thank you great writer. I welcome your comment. I was going through a situation in my workplace and I write my feelings. I have'n a clue what a piece may look like until it is finished and I get a comment on it. thanks again my friend...

[Sami Khalil]

I understand for inspiration can come in any place or form...Bravo