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A Poem by Monkeybananers

and i'll always leave with a smile on my face and a tear in my eye, but i'll blame it on the better times; though all i'm trying to prove is i'm strong. Truth is I'm not and when the door closes and i find myself alone, I break. shattering into the smallest pieces known to man. I become dust, a mere speck on your memory; an afterthought for when the lights go out. You'll only wonder who i was for a second, think about the silly things i've said but never how i cared; because you never knew. 

I'm the stars. Not the brightest one, but the furthest one, undiscovered to the human eye, but there all the same. You won't notice me, won't see me sparkle; because I'm not there. Not until time passes. And as time does pass you'll remember me, but by them i'll be faded. Leaving this time on my own accord because Im tired of the fight. Of struggling to be a player on the stage, rather than sitting on the sidelines. 

© 2010 Monkeybananers


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I can totally relate to everything you just said in here. This is a very powerful poem that I thoroughly enjoyed! The beginning lines "and i'll always leave with a smile on my face and a tear in my eye, but i'll blame it on the better times; though all i'm trying to prove is i'm strong. Truth is I'm not and when the door closes and i find myself alone, I break." draw me so into the story I can't help but read more! This is a fantastic poem! Can't wait to read more of your poems!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I def admire the imagery you expand on throughout the prose. Although I recommend better balancing your imagery as you go from being "mere dust" to a "star". So the imagery does not contrast well, I'd recommend sticking with the star image and further discussing what you feel your role in the world is.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I really liked this poem, but in my opinion it felt more like a story, either way it was great, good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Once again Nicole, I find myself amazed at your writing. I don't care what you say. your stuff still trumps mine. I shall improve however!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can totally relate to everything you just said in here. This is a very powerful poem that I thoroughly enjoyed! The beginning lines "and i'll always leave with a smile on my face and a tear in my eye, but i'll blame it on the better times; though all i'm trying to prove is i'm strong. Truth is I'm not and when the door closes and i find myself alone, I break." draw me so into the story I can't help but read more! This is a fantastic poem! Can't wait to read more of your poems!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The painful reality you express so sincerely in this is amazing. I can easily relate to this. I also love how your words flow so easily and remain interesting throughout the entire read. Well done! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Monkeybananers
Monkeybananers

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I'm bad at these things, but I'll make it exact...I'm Nicole, 21 years old from the Boston, MA area. I went to a Vocational school in wakefield for highschool. I moved to Kentucky a year ago, its a to.. more..

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A Poem by Monkeybananers