Your words are clear & intense, showing a deep disappointment in the way a love situation turned out. I don't agree with the idea of expecting others to be what we want them to be -- to me, that's not love. The results are often better if we don't carry unrealistic expectations into our relationships. But despite my current opinion, there are many people, including myself in my younger days, who experience disappointments just like you've shown us here (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you. This one is actually about a parental bond
6 Years Ago
Thank you for sharing that tidbit, which helps me understand your poem better. As a victim of childh.. read moreThank you for sharing that tidbit, which helps me understand your poem better. As a victim of childhood abuse, I still stand by my reservations, tho! *smile*
Your words are clear & intense, showing a deep disappointment in the way a love situation turned out. I don't agree with the idea of expecting others to be what we want them to be -- to me, that's not love. The results are often better if we don't carry unrealistic expectations into our relationships. But despite my current opinion, there are many people, including myself in my younger days, who experience disappointments just like you've shown us here (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you. This one is actually about a parental bond
6 Years Ago
Thank you for sharing that tidbit, which helps me understand your poem better. As a victim of childh.. read moreThank you for sharing that tidbit, which helps me understand your poem better. As a victim of childhood abuse, I still stand by my reservations, tho! *smile*
I love how you depict heartbreak in this writing. "Misguided hate and anger" is so direct and perfect! Also "This glowing figure embodied love"-what a great line! I love that image! Great piece!
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you so much! There are so many different types of heartbreak. This one dealt with a parental f.. read moreThank you so much! There are so many different types of heartbreak. This one dealt with a parental figure
Ooh-I totally get that! I have a likewise pent-up amount of misguided hate and anger over different .. read moreOoh-I totally get that! I have a likewise pent-up amount of misguided hate and anger over different situations involving my parents (father abandoned us-grew up with a dad and mother became an alcoholic (just as absent as the father????))
6 Years Ago
Lol mine is very similar. This poem was about my mother though.
6 Years Ago
Thanks for bringing it to life in a beautiful way. I can definitely relate!
Whence light is the compass of ones road, only he illuminates the heart through the windows of our eyes. Oh, but like the moon is your body, who harnesses the light of the Sun to shown the way through the darkness and stars. If light is not present, perhaps sound may guide your way, the sound... of your heart
Very powerfully written. The beginning sets up the scene for a star-crossed love story, but the rest tells of the tragedy of a failed love and the consequences. You capture the feeling of loneliness/betrayal very well.
I just enjoy writing. Don't care to much about the criticism. Writing should be about storytelling and the feeling it gives you as you write and create. more..