Into The Deep

I've never been in a place like this,
A place so dark I will always miss,
This,
This is where I've always been,
No light, no fight, that's the place I'm in,

I'm not afraid of this place,
I wanna stay here forever,
I never want the fall to stop,
I never wanna come up for air.

And then I see you.

We submerge into the deep,
We come here, leave, the cycle repeats,
I pray we don't pass the point of no return,
I pray we escape the flames before we burn,

Now I'm out of my mind,
Gone to that place that no one will ever find,
No one, but you,
You're all I need to see, to discover, to know that this place is true,
That this dark place is love,
And the only other person with me is you.

Reviews

[Monica M.]

I admire your writing, it speaks very much to me. To face the unknown, and choose to be there, is beautiful. To dare, I see it as to dare... yes. Then another comes to the picture, and you're not alone, anymore. "I pray, we escape the flames before we burn" What a lovely line there. This special person, seems to be collided into one with you, and you show the reader, it's needed to dare, for being loved, and to love... it's an art itself... well done.

- Elisa

[Monica M.]

Thank you Elisa! Your review was beautiful. I loved your understanding of it all. Thanks love :-)

You are very welcome dear one, I enjoyed it so much! can't wait to read more of you. -xx- :)

[Leviathus Fortes]

To face the unknown with the person whom you love...

Wonderful read.

[Natureislelove]

Very nice poem :-) i like the setting and the strength in the words. thanks for sharing.

[RiverRei]

Brought shivers to me. I like this a lot. It's a dark poem about love which is something I'm not used to. An original take on an unoriginal subject. I love the way you formatted this. It is interesting and doesn't mess with the flow of the piece at all. I've felt the darkness you describe and feeling comfortable in it, however, I now wish I knew what it was like to feel love in that place as well. Thank you for sharing this, it made me think. :)

[Monica M.]

I have a lot of people make comments on the formatting of my writer. It's what I'm most comfortable with when I'm writing poetry. I like to step outside of the box. That's the way I always wrote my poetry on Tumblr. Thanks for the review!

[Finder's Keeper]

Gorgeous piece, haunting and comforting at the same time.
The last two lines are sublime.

[Monica M.]

I like how you said haunting and comforting at the same time. It really is. Thank you!

[Rosalina Pauk]

This is so beautiful! I like how at first love is overwhelming and something to escape, but as soon as someone else is there it seems so much better, so much safer and yet so much more dangerous at the same time! It makes me think that at first love is unrequited, and it's only painful and leaves a sort of aching, but as soon as it's requited, everything is ok and it will be ok, despite what others may think. Great job!

[Awakened Rose]

SO beyond beautiful. You can feel the depth in your words. Amazing thank you for sharing!

[Monica M.]

Beyond beautiful?! Wow!!! Thank you!

[Mila]

Emotional descriptions were phenominal. Anyone can take something from this poem; that is the mark of true talent :) well done!

[Monica M.]

Wow Mila! Thank you so much :-)

[misha]

Such a great write! What a lovely description of your emotions. Great job!

[Monica M.]

Thank you Misha

[Ti]

Intriguing, great piece of writing :D
I love the lines 'We submerge into the deep, We come here, leave, the cycle repeats, I pray we don't pass the point of no return, I pray we escape the flames before we burn,', love it! :D

[Monica M.]

I love feedback on my writing so thank you sooooo much! It means a lot :-)

[Ti]

Your very welcome! :D

[fireblossom]

Wow do I relate to this story... I have of late been watching cycles in my life...some good some self destructive. I ask why am I like this...Your character has accepted her life and her self as must I. Very enlightening and touching dear poet.

[Monica M.]

Thank you! I love to find writing I can relate to as well. And when I do, I can never forget it or the way it makes me feel. Such as, "Keep the Knife Close By" lol I will never forget that poem :-)