They fall without a sound...

Blurring the world from my sight,

They find their way down...

Snatching away all the logic,

They fall onto the ground...

Heavy upon my heart,

They weigh nothing to those around...

Fueling my burning emotions, 

They let all reason drown...

Depriving me of all my strength,

They continue to flow unbound...

Awakening the suppressed sobs, 

They make my head pound...

Making the world seem distant,

They fall-my tears, without a sound...

~Moniba.

Author's Note

Let me know if it seems incomplete or if there's room for improvement and how.

Reviews

[chloe slagle]

you are so great :) this is one of the best things ever you are so great :)

[Moniba]

Whoa. Thanks:D Always feels great to be appreciated. Read more of my poems, please? They're on my blog. www.theordinaryblog2.wordpress.com

[chloe slagle]

okay :) i would love to :) they are wonderful

[Moniba]

:) you're a lovely reader.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Moniba]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Talal Hussain]

Great composition Muniba..your creativity amazes me :-)

[Moniba]

Thank you very much.
Correction : It's spelled Moniba. ;)

[Talal Hussain]

oops sorry, Moniba...:-)

[Emily Feret]

They weigh nothing to those around...

I love this line, so heavy. I love it so much. I really think this poem is complete and it flows very nicely. I think it is just as it should be

[Moniba]

Thank you, Emily :) I love this poem too.... It's...real. If you get what I mean.

[Holly Mason]

lonely soundless tears
these words are put together so nicely
reads with a nice easy flow
love the title
thank you for sharing

[Moniba]

Thankyou for the encouraging review :) And for your time.

[Dr. Wood ?]

Again, it seems whole...and again it is quite stunning in its simplicity

[Moniba]

I thank you, Dr.Wood :) That is quite a compliment.

[khalid]

that is really great..it is mind provoking piece..it makes me wonder who you are refering to here...alot of creatures can be related to this..very lovely poem..

[Moniba]

Thank you. I'm referring to my tears. It is mentioned in the last line.

[The dark story]

whoa!!..the rhyming scheme is so great and elegant...the poem flows with the emotions and it just strikes at the heart !!1...truly great!!

[Moniba]

Thank you Atiba :)

[.]

very nice flow, very sweet music

[Moniba]

I appreciate the kind review ;)

[.]

our pleasure..

[junaid altaf]

actually i think its very intact and words used do tend to stand for the emotions but it would have been much better if there would have been much more rhyming.....
but overall its very good..............

[Moniba]

Thank you, I appreciate the criticism.
Every second line does rhyme though..

[junaid altaf]

i thought if each would have rhymed it would sparkle out...........

[Moniba]

Hmm, i'm not that brilliant yet. But you're right.