Shelter from the storm

The beginnings of a lyric, perhaps…

A light shines in the distance there 

Storms rage among these stones

But, there shines welcome…

Shelter from the storm

Rising strong, oft threatened

Still standing in the distance

Surviving, waiting in welcome…

Shelter from the storm

Author's Note

This one is unfinished, I think…

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"come in she said i'll give ya, shelter from the storm"

"and the deputy walks on hard nails and the preacher rides a mount, nothing really matters much it's doom alone that counts" (dylan)

but there is that light in the distance, always...there is that refuge from the deluge...if we are patient and determined, we can find it.

i like this...and would like to see where you might take it...although you know me, and the whole less is more thing....i feel this allows me to travel as far as the storm will take me.

[MomzillaNC]

Yeah, I feel the same usually, “Less is more.” I think it’s close to finished. Maybe one more stanza to round it out for a lyric, or maybe just a chorus…

Thanks for your input. “but there is that light in the distance, always...there is that refuge from the deluge...if we are patient and determined, we can find it.” This comment has me thinking about this again…

[Solar]

A light truly shines in this poem - a beckoning beacon in the wave-like verses.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Donald Meikle]

Reads like sunrise at Stonehenge
Or moonlit dreams.

Whatever I like it
and I like Dylan too

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[paul sal.....]

One could ask god to shelter us from the storm, I personally think god intended us to find our own shelter and I think it is time to build an massive embrella to hold and embrace all mankind but all have to want to participate; why is it so hard?

[MomzillaNC]

I don’t know. We’re so busy trying to tell each other just who and what God is, that we don’t seem to have time to actually talk to God nor do the work of Faith to increase social justice and create peace in the world.

[Samaira]

I like how you make a shelter in a storm sound so welcoming. Metaphorically, It sounds great.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. :D

[Dr. Wood ?]

sounds to me as if it stopped mid flow....But I am lousy at reviewing as I barely understand most poetry..I sort of stick to the simple stuff,..This is a great beginning tho'

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks. It is unfinished still. I need a bridge and at least one more stanza.

[Sami Khalil]

I like this poem a lot especially the sentiments and the repetitions. Thank you for sharing....:)....?

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. I’m still thinking about this one. It definitely needs a bridge and might be in for at least one more stanza.

[Sami Khalil]

As you like. You are welcome...:)............

[MomzillaNC]

:) :D

[Sami Khalil]

:)........................

[Moonie]

Unfinished? Maybe... a poem is never completely finished...
But I like the message and the imagery! :))

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks. This actually seems like a lyric, really a hymn, to me now. As a lyric, it is definitely finished. I’m still “stewing” on it.

[TheLostMind]

The message in this one is really good. There is always hope. Life can bring us down but we can still get up. The imagery, the description here is mesmerising. . You took me to a beach. I could actually here waves crashing against rocks (not lying ).

A really good write :)

[MomzillaNC]

Very cool. Thanks. The picture I've drawn is on a windswept rocky hillside. Could work as a lighthouse too, though.

[TheLostMind]

Wc . I meant "hear".. :P

[MomzillaNC]

:D :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

I like it. You've done a good job of setting the scene. I read this and imagine a lighthouse in the distance, built to withstand the worst Mother Nature has to offer, with a light of welcome for all to see among the stones on a rocky craig. Beautiful...

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.