I Love You…

Something rather experimental for me in style. Composed 21 January 2015 for my husband's birthday (22 Jan).

I love you…

Listen to the quickening of my breath

of the thum-thump, thump-thump beating of my

virtuous and passionately racing heart

ever hastened by the nearness of you

You gathered the pieces of my shattered heart

overlaid the shards upon your own and

united both hearts to beat as one

I Love You…

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

oh! and i love this poem!! and thank you so much for this perfect expression!:
"of the thum-thump, thump-thump beating of my
virtuous and passionately racing heart"

its what we all want.. its what we all need .. so uplifted by this poetry .. thank you for sharing!! great job says i!!
E.

[MomzillaNC]

Wow. Thank you for such fulsome praise!

[Einstein Noodle]

well deserved .. and i do truly love what you say in it!

[MomzillaNC]

ty :)

[armin]

MZ ,pretty good surprise for your dear hubby. I liked the concept of shattered heart, overlaid and united both as one. Creative as I would say for this.

armin. .

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you so much.

[Saddam]

Oh this is one of amazing work which i have read here,
I like most YOU stanza.
Imaginative work.

[MomzillaNC]

ty :)

[Moonie]

Such a great acostic poem!! My favourite lines would be
"You gathered the pieces of my shattered heart
overlaid the shards upon your own and
united both hearts to beat as one"

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks so much.

[Matching Socks]

How lucky you are to be in a happy loving marriage.
I lovely acrostic tribute to your dear husband.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. Yes, I'm blessed beyond words… and I never forget it.

[NeiL ArandA]

What a lovely tribute and gift to your husband... You have immortalize this words in your heart by penning and posting it here...

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. He's a great source of inspiration for romantic and uplifting poetry. It seems the most well received of my works lead back to him…

Writers write what they know.

[Fran Marie]

great acrostic ..beautifully expressed words of love within.

.nice work!

[MomzillaNC]

TYVM :)

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a simply written yet beautifully laid out Acrostic. It is a difficult form of poetry to not feel either forced or overly "Hallmark" which this one is neither.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. This is just more of my real life -- I never forget how amazingly blessed I am; my husband is always great inspiration for me. I was experimenting. I didn't even realize I was writing an "acrostic" poem. :D

[Lyn Anderson]

That is probably why it doesn't come off false, as many Acrostics do.

[MomzillaNC]

Maybe. All I know its what I've always been told, "writers write what they know." Everything else is just posturing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a wonderfully romantic acrostic, MomZ---

so tender and moving.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow, that is a beautifully penned acrostic.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome.