An Autumn Sigh

Spreading stains o’fiery glory ‘cross forest scenes

Dying flames of vitality…red & gold & brown & greens

Bright Autumn color beneath an azure sky

Shedding leaves fell upon fading lawns lie

Bare-boned, skeletal trees on the horizon

Leave evergreen reminders of vibrant holidays, my son

by D. Denise Dianaty

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

snappy layout! its the evergreens that keep ones hope and faith in Spring alive through all the dreary days and nights of winter's greys ... i especially am blessed as you make this a special encouraging conversation with the speakers son ...unique and surprising turn says i! good stuff mom!
E.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Rene Salinas]

What an enchanting writing! In fact if I had to be honest a little envious as we over here don't get the kind of display offered in this descriptive nature of the writing. Funnily enough real great detail tochange the colour, normally I find myself "feeling " dogmatic about them details (extra point for using that word there) as working in IT puts you off from that sort of embelishment but in here it adds an extra layer. The commonality of feelings I guess found that Autumn is the time of balance between day and night, before night takes over and brings the coming winter, a time of darkness and death. I really like it becuase of it. It seems to carry a duality between light and dark that exists in us, and in us.

After all all things must die before they can be born.


Thankyou

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. Autumn is full of color and meaning, I think. And, there's a reason Autumn is also called "Fall;" because of the falling leaves and the sense of falling into Winter.

[Rene Salinas]

Yeah over here we were cursed with one weather only for Autumn is called "the invariable scales of grey and its affinity to rain" well someone had to get lucky that way....

[MomzillaNC]

Where is "over here?"

[Rene Salinas]

U.K. England

[MomzillaNC]

Seriously? No Autumn color? It's the same global temperate zone as this part of the US.

[Rene Salinas]

I know no not a lot of colour I am afraid, very green at the moment, very dark right now and raining, blessed with great weather!

[MomzillaNC]

Interesting. But what about poems like John Clare's "Autumn" and "Ode to the West Wind" by Percy Shelley?

[Rene Salinas]

Oh no I thinkthe weather has changed dramatically I thought it was a well known factor. It has been on the news and all. It was very mild last week that's why it is still very green

[MomzillaNC]

Oh. This is an unusual occurrence. I thought you were saying it's the way it always is there. Sorry.

[The Black Warrior]

Nicely done, you painted a picture in my head perfectly. The lines flow gracefully.

Two thumbs up!

~Suk

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[The Black Warrior]

You are very welcome!

[Moonie]

I am a huge fan of season poems. I like how you have used your rhymes and the fonts, also the fact that you made the lines slant to symbolise falling leaves.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. I'm glad you got that thing on the slant. No one else has mentioned it, except KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

The form and style really add to this piece. Nice for a positive spin on autumn, despite the fact that I am not so positive about it.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. How are you doing today?

Except that it's ragweed season and that it's a precursor to the cold of Winter, I love autumn. And, my utility bill is cut in half!

[Lyn Anderson]

Tired but poking along. Ah, the utility bill here is more expensive in winter.:)

[emmajoy]

' Bare-boned, skeletal trees on the horizon -- Leave evergreen reminders of vibrant holidays, my son.. '

Soft, sweet phrasing and a poem I'd like to have written! To my mind, Autumn isn't the beginning of the year's fading but through all its beautiful colours - as you include so brightly - it's a reminder of what every year of Life can and does hold, if we look for it. Such calm thoughts, gently written.

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks so much for your fulsome review.

[emmajoy]

'Pleasure :)

[Tina Kline]

A very creative and breathtaking autumn poem. Well done. I enjoyed the autumn feel as it is my favorite time of year and loved the format you picked for this poem.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you very much.

[Tina Kline]

You're very welcome.

[David O Whalen (O Haol..]

Nicely written and rhymed Momzilla! I'm always a pushover for seasonal poetry, but this is a very good example of that genre: one that many people try, but very few people do well. The colors were a nice touch that not too many would have thought to do.

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks so much.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful writing, great imagery. Liked it very much.

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks so much.

[Sami Khalil]

So beautiful and well described. It was enchanting as the season. Excellent...:).............

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........

[MsJewel]

A beautiful description of Autumn and the changing leaves....I wish we had seasons in California...thank you for the beautiful images.

:) Julie

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.