This poem reminds me a bit of It Is Well. I'm sure you know the story behind that song, if not, check it out on the internet. I've often thought what it might be like being left alone. I don't like the prospects. I know I would do a lot of talking to myself. My wife is my best friend, it would be hard to move on without her.
Well, you certainly are a wonderful poet. I found this very easy to read and digest. Too many times I find myself having to think about what the author is trying to say. I don't like thinking too much as I am but a simple minded person.
Have a wonderful day.
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Thank you. Did you listen to the recording too?
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I didn't at first, but went back after your note and listened. Very well done. You have a nice voice.. read moreI didn't at first, but went back after your note and listened. Very well done. You have a nice voice. Thanks for sharing.
Beautiful poem MZ but I'm so surprised by how beautiful your singing voice is.
I'm not sure why it surprises me, I guess it's just that most people think they sound good when they don't really (like me) but yours is so sweet and lovely. Such sad feelings in this one.
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Thanks so much. I'm pleased you like my little vocal offering.
I could feel the sadness, the missing and the tears in this poem today Momz. You have allowed the emotions of this piece wash upon us readers with you wondrous words. Beautiful.
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Thank you. That's me singing.
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I have to apologize, I can't access soundcloud from this computer at work, I have to listen when I g.. read moreI have to apologize, I can't access soundcloud from this computer at work, I have to listen when I get home later.
Awww, what a sad song! You definitely should post the recording once you've got it completed [=
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Thank you. I will post the song.
This is actually a companion piece to the short story.. read moreThank you. I will post the song.
This is actually a companion piece to the short story, "The Dance Plays On…" serialized on WC.
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Putting the first part on my reading list. Welcome to Alpha Readers, by the way, Mira and Noel were .. read morePutting the first part on my reading list. Welcome to Alpha Readers, by the way, Mira and Noel were saying a lot of good things about you on Twitter [=
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Thank you. I'm honored by all the praise I've been receiving. It's kind of weird for me. I've always.. read moreThank you. I'm honored by all the praise I've been receiving. It's kind of weird for me. I've always written poetry, but rather thought it was "bad poetry." I'm feeling much more confident in my skills as a writer since joining WC.
A amazing poem. You create place and situation.
"I lift my eyes to see you
Your smile once shone on me
We danced a while as one heart
Now I dance alone"
The above lines were strong. Left the reader with a lonely vision. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
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Thank you very much. This piece, and "Whisper Me A Kiss" are companion pieces to my short story, "Th.. read moreThank you very much. This piece, and "Whisper Me A Kiss" are companion pieces to my short story, "The Dance Plays On…"
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I need to read the story. The poetry make the reader want to know more.
Thank you for your kind reviews
and comments you left on my page
I will leave you 2 more reviews :)
Blessings. Benita
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Thank you. Yes, I do sing. In fact, I've already laid the vocal track for this piece. I'm waiting of.. read moreThank you. Yes, I do sing. In fact, I've already laid the vocal track for this piece. I'm waiting of the instrumental track to be finished, then I will post the final recording here.
These lyrics were the inspiration for my short story, "The Dance Plays On…" I've serialized it here on WC. Be warned, you'll need tissues close at hand as you read it.
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Ah ok you're welcome nice I don't sing might could
but my passion is writing and that Is my g.. read moreAh ok you're welcome nice I don't sing might could
but my passion is writing and that Is my gift from God been writing since 3rd grade was mostly short stories then and turned to poetry older I got and poems will be like stories at times it been 28years of writing poetry and always been good with animals and children my passions I hope it turns out beautifully :) blessings. Benita
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I've been writing all my life, but never thought it was any good. I kept it to myself until I found .. read moreI've been writing all my life, but never thought it was any good. I kept it to myself until I found WC. This forum has made me much more confident in my writing.
But, I'm a classically-trained artist and have always shared my singing voice in church (I studied music as well).
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I have always shared my writing I read books and studied different words and many things my grandp.. read moreI have always shared my writing I read books and studied different words and many things my grandpa loved to teach so I love learning I have a Teachable heart I have read books on different trees Knowledge and inspiration comes in many forms but it was all God and for me it is natural so I knew who to write didn't need training God turns the wheel. and I have books from our church and I love Max Lucida I think that is how you spell his last name a Christian writer and also have ones of Charles Stanley I am a Sponge and when I can renew my Library card will be getting books again but I have many at home I am just careful of what I read and the music I listen to :) and watch on TV. I am into Medicine that is way I think I did the Life Guard Training and CPR Training I love helping others.
It is so sad, it almost made me cry. I imagined myself been the person which you have spoken about. It is hard to lose somebody so near and so dear, for you always remember the things that you both did together and the memories seems to never be gone forever, they stay very close to the heart.
Very well.
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Thank you very much. The full tale, and it is truly tragic and haunting, is the subject of my short.. read moreThank you very much. The full tale, and it is truly tragic and haunting, is the subject of my short story, "The Dance Plays On…" which I've serialized here in nine parts.
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Cool, I'm going to read it! :)
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Keep the tissues handy…
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hahaha I will, I print out the work to read it at home since I only have few minutes to use the comp.. read morehahaha I will, I print out the work to read it at home since I only have few minutes to use the computer. I will leave comments tonight.
"now I dance alone" - a striking piece, well done, great read.
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Thank you.
These lyrics (sung to a melancholy, haunting melody I composed over 30 year.. read moreThank you.
These lyrics (sung to a melancholy, haunting melody I composed over 30 years ago -- though the lyrics are new) were the inspiration and companion piece for the short story, "The Dance Plays On…" which I posted in serialized excerpts on this site.
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I plan to post the recording soon, once the instrumental track has been laid.
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Make sure you keep me posted when you do
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BTW: If you read the story, I recommend you first read "Whisper Me A Kiss" as it too, seems to be a .. read moreBTW: If you read the story, I recommend you first read "Whisper Me A Kiss" as it too, seems to be a companion to the short story.
Thank you. I will be posting the song once my son finishes learning the instrumental part on his cla.. read moreThank you. I will be posting the song once my son finishes learning the instrumental part on his classical guitar. I hope it won't be more than a couple of months.
If you read my work and comment, I'll return the favor on your work. I'm not adding new friends nor accepting read requests.
I am a classically trained artist and was an award-winning graphic desig.. more..