Sweet Addiction

For all us morning zombies… the cure is coffee!

Steam rising and dancing

Across the rippling midnight pool

The welcome caress of vapors

Sensual and inviting, 

The warming embrace of aroma

Now flooding ethereal white

Swirling deep to rise

Till clink, tink, clank, chink

The pool now renders

A devine decoction

That distillation of welcoming dawn

Smooth and rich and just right sweet

Porcelain vessel of joy

Author's Note

I didn't know what to call this one. Thanks to my best friend, who's also a writer (a novelist) I now have the perfect title! When I saw it written in her message, it hit me like a bolt of lightning!

Reviews

[Brandy]

' The welcome caress of vapors, sensual and inviting. '
Okay, now I'm awake. : )

The steam rising and then falling. Yes, caffeine is needed it seems, to begin the day.
You paint such vivid images with your words. This is so beautifully written and presented.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you!

[Tam Warink]

For a minute, I was like "all serious" and then it hit me. No, no... it's about coffee you dumb bunny. Read it again. So I did, visualizing the "Porcelain vessel of joy", the "ethereal white swirling deep to rise", smelling the "embrace of aroma" and hearing the "clink, tink, clank, chink" of the silver spoon held so daintily in the grasp of adoring, reverent fingers. I think in this piece, your steam is rising as your words dance and skip across that dark pool of thoughtful mornings. You're right mom, I did like it! :)

100 welcoming dawns

P.S. I hope it's about coffee, otherwise I'm going to take my imagination into the shop for an overhaul.

[MomzillaNC]

Ambiguous, isn't it? LOL Yes, it's about coffee -- ROTFL -- specifically, that first morning cup of coffee. Best part of rolling out of bed, on cold mornings, especially. Thank you.

[MomzillaNC]

I was just rereading your review. It tickles me so much!

[MomzillaNC]

We should both be writing for coffee houses!

[Tam Warink]

..writing for coffee houses. Is that like a paying gig? O_o How many words = 1 cup of joe/jane? :)

[MomzillaNC]

Well, I'd expect to be paid in hard, cold currency! :D

[Tam Warink]

All humor aside for the moment. I'm conflicted. I know people get paid to write. I've gotten paid to write. But how do you see a coffee house paying for an author to write (other than advertising or a review of some sort)? Is this like a 60's retro-poetry coffee house ala G-village or similar or a wishful fantasy?

[MomzillaNC]

It would be as in coffee advertisements. Remember the whole Taster's Choice romance? A screenplay writer got his break writing those commercials. I can't remember the writer's name now. I read about it years ago when the commercials were running. And, I remember seeing poems used to sell products in magazines many times. Why shouldn't I be paid to do something like that too? Heaven knows I've been paid for my graphic design work commercially. There really is money to be made in the field if you can nail yourself to that grind.

[Tam Warink]

I had to "research" your reference. Taster Choice.. good grief. I just realized that I have "missing time." Is there a relationship between coffee, missing time and UFOs? Was I "off world" during the 90's?! O_O

[MomzillaNC]

Well, coffee is definitely "out of this world…"

[DJ]

I wish I was awake enough to enjoy the vista you paint,sadly I am semi-comatose when brewing my own.
Wonderful depiction.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[AprilRN1210]

what a way to tease the senses of the readers, especially those of us who love coffee... sweet addiction, indeed... I am a night shift nurse, so needless to say, I drink it:)

some of the rich descriptions in here were divine.. and the way it flowed through the process of fixing it to perfection, just the way you like it, where it is warm and ready for you to enjoy.. yes.. not nice... now I want a cup.. which goes to show, it was well written....

YUM...

[MomzillaNC]

LOL! :D I posted this on my FB too, just to torture folks!

[AprilRN1210]

again.. not nice... :)

[MomzillaNC]

Bwa-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha-haaaaa

[AprilRN1210]

.....lol....:P

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

This is really nice. I must say that i really enjoy your work. Its so capturing in its deadly solace.

[MomzillaNC]

Umm… okay. It's about that first morning cup of coffee! :D

[Rene Salinas]

Oh, well the subliminal quality here is strong so I will be right back after I make a cup of coffee and continue the review. - Back!! Let's get the how suggestive and attractive your writing is because ultimately is just coffee right? So as I male, prmitive, devoided of all sensetivity would ask What's the big fuzz? So the writing tell me as the dance of aroma, and thickening liquidity and seductive vaporous gestures all come to hunt for the sense of smell.

Oh, that does indeed sound good!

I read your notes and I came up with two:

No one can understand the truth until....

Somethings are better rich

Thankyou

[MomzillaNC]

OMG! This is, by far, my favorite review I've yet had! My 10-year old was reading over my shoulder and we were both laughing riotously! Thank you. I'll add your title suggestions to the list I'm considering. Yours are certainly hint the least at coffee -- which is what I'm looking for to preserve the ambiguity.

[Cryingkate]

How about "Sunrise Brew" ?

[MomzillaNC]

Maybe. Thanks. I'm making a list and will add that one to it.

[Cryingkate]

:-) Thanks for making this good write fun by sharing the Kava and the Title Search :-)

[MomzillaNC]

I got the title for it: Sweet Addiction

[Cryingkate]

Kool !...........

[Bill O. Writes]

"Dopamine"

Seeing as coffee is a pleasantry to you, maybe consider the dopamine release in your brain when you drink it, as a title?

Idk, not being a coffee drinker myself makes it hard to relate but I still enjoyed your poem for reading. Make coffee sound pretty good :).

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[MomzillaNC]

I got the title for it: Sweet Addiction

[Linda alexander]

That distillation of welcoming dawn
Smooth and rich and just right sweet
Porcelain vessel of joy

Magnificent ride, heaven bloomed with stars, submissions of joy, well penned poem, great expression

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. Do you have a suggestion for a title? I'm trying to avoid the obvious coffee titles.

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, let me think about a title, take care

[MomzillaNC]

I got the title for it: Sweet Addiction

[Linda alexander]

Great, take care

[Pushkar Prabhat]

"Vessel of joy"? "Steamy pool of delight"? "steamy delight"? ignore the last two, they suggest a very different meaning. :P
or maybe don't give a tile or just let it say: "What am I"?
anyways.......very refreshing poem and a rewarding read.
great description and imagery.
i loved it.
p.s. this poem exponentially increased my love for coffee.
:)

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. That first cup is always such an experience…

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome any yes indeed they are wonderful.

[MomzillaNC]

I got the title for it: Sweet Addiction

[Pushkar Prabhat]

i saw! wonderful!

[ANM]

Very well done had me puzzling for a while!!! How about Expresso.......caffeinetopia ....Homage to the Bean!! They may give you some pointers....

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. Homage… something maybe. Or Ode… to something. I'm trying to avoid the obvious coffee references. My husband thought it was about sex! LOL

[ANM]

Hmm well it did flash before me at one point.....

[ANM]

I also had that thought for a while! How about Caelestis Fabae... Which is Latin for heavenly bean!

[MomzillaNC]

I got the title for it: Sweet Addiction (Though yours was in the top running before my best friend -- a novelist, herself -- came up with this one. Thanks, anyway.)

[ANM]

Ok not a worry at least it was in the running....