Chapter 1 - Awaken

Detective Rein awakens shortly on a beach...

 

"Hurghh!!!" I can feel a deep heaviness lingering within my breast. The darkness obscurring my vision still as I roll over to empty the sea from my lungs.  The light of the morning sun burns my weary eyes as I roll back onto your back.  As I stare up into the sky, I can distinctly make out a person looking down on me. Their muffled murmur grows distantly silent as I fade back out of consciousness…

The sea's cold dead touch no longer graced my skin. I no longer lie upon the sandy beach but a soft bed and under a nice thin blanket.  The small quiet room is lit up by nothing but the sunlight through the window.  Sitting up, I notice my belongings on a nearby table.  The clothes lie under the light through the window. Dry, folded, and neatly placed for convenience they are. Whoever lived here had stripped me.  Buttoning my shirt up, I happen to catch a glance of what seemed to be a person far off in the distance out the window.  I make my way closer for a better view and I can see a person fishing off a small makeshift pier.  That person would most likely be the one who filtered me from sweet death.

I left the room, taking a peek out of the door before stepping into the building’s main room.  The place was quite well-kept.  On the other side of the hall I can see doors to two other rooms.  Another bedroom and the bathroom, I suppose.  Surprisingly, above the main area hang a light left turned off.  I did not think there would electricity in a house like this.  The open windows and door were enough to light up the small house however.

“Oh!  You’re awake!” squeaked a girl’s voice.

There standing in the once empty doorway was a young girl.  Around fifteen or sixteen years old I presume.  Her sleek dark hair looked chic under the sunlight.  In her hands she carried a bowl of vegetables.

“Yeah” I answer back.  “Were you the one who rescued me?”

“No” she chuckles as she places the bowl down on the table.  “My name’s Sarah.  Nice to meet you.”

She stares at me as if waiting for a response.

“So who saved me?”  I ask again.

“Umm, the person you’re looking for is over.”  She points towards the beach.  “They’re out fishing at the dock out there by the beach.”

Making my way towards the pier I could hear her shout “Hey!  You didn’t introduce yourself!”  She really did not seem to be the type to yell out like that.  “And you didn’t think me either!” she yelled out as I reached the pier.  There at the edge, fishing, was a young person, most likely around the same age as Sarah.  Their short blonde hair gleams in the sun as if they had just gotten out of the water.

“Bout time you got up” he smirks, not even facing me.  Quite a girly voice for a boy.

            “You were the one that save me huh kid?” I respong as I made my way behind him.

            “Yup!  The name’s Sammy”, glancing back at me momentarily.

            Damn It! I think to myself.  Why does someone have to come and fish me out of the sea.  I wish I could’ve gone…

            “Hey! “he shouts, interrupting my thoughts, “So you’re not going to thank me or anything?”

            “No.”  I can see him tense up at my response.  “By the way, I’m Nick Rein.”

“Detective Nick Rein” he interrupts again, smiling back at me with satisfaction.  “I found your wallet and other stuff in your pocke….”

“Where am I?”

“I don’t know but I guess you could say you’re in Hellio.  The village is quite a bit that way through the woods.  Just follow the path.”

He directs my attention towards a dark dense forest further down from the house.  The trees seemed to mass and cut off the beach from the rest of the area, almost as if it was being hidden from something.

 

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To feel, to love, without.

Reviews

[Ryan]

Hmmm once again great job. A couple typos/mistakes though. Second paragraph: it should be lay instead of lie, and a suggestion: I would take out the up after lit, so it does sound redundant because of the up after sitting. Third paragraph: it should be hangs, not hang. 11th paragraph: Sarah's dialogue is a little off, or you mispelled thank as think. That was all I could find. Also, you might want to find someway to describe Nick...maybe a mirror in the house or his reflection in water. Just so the reader knows what he looks like. Anyways, so far, so good.