Grey

Purity they call it.

White as snow:

Frozen, cold and lifeless.

 

It was easy in the dark,

Where I couldn’t see your eyes,

Black as burnt coal.

 

The rain outside was white noise;

Cleansing, pure noise.

But we didn’t listen.

 

We played a song,

Smooth warm voice, black metal strings,

Drum that matched my pulse.

 

How I trembled,

A rush of torrid blood,

Stirred my pale white flesh.

 

  Nothing then

Was right or wrong,

Only shades of grey.

 

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

Loved it. It flowed thin and smooth and subtly haunting. I admire the sound of the rain. And I admire the shades of grey because they are calm and neutral. You said very little and meant alot. A beautifully dreary little piece of wandering thoughts. Thank you for the read request!

-youoweyoupay

[Sweets]

Nice use of similes :)
"Purity they call it.
White as snow:
Frozen, cold and lifeless."
The first three lines grab the reader's attention!
I loved the beginning and the ending! I actually loved it all!
Great work!

[Jonathan De Elvira]

agreed with this poem...its such insight that made it a little deep...

[Dante Balsote]

What is neither black nor white has a name.

[C. Rose]

I like how you mixed it all into grey! This was a very creative use of symbolism intertwined here. Good write!

[Nobody.]

Good imagery....and an interesting philosophical spin....got me thinking. That's always a big plus! Really enjoyed! Cheers!

[Tony]

Nice use of color to convey a definate mood-- very creative imagery throughout. I like it!

[Nothing Personal]

A very very deep work. Poetic masterpiece where words are chosen from an Idea store and placed till it makes sense. We can keep an assortment of paintings but we choose only a couple to display in our living room. you have done a great job..not at all disorganized, very enigmatic..

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow. This is jaw dropping work.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

i like the ending line of the poem:) i also like the story you attached and not just description of the color which has given the color a deep meaning