A Love Poem

I wrote this for my younger sister. One day I'll let her read it....

Step on board with me; we’ll fly across the sea.

I found a yellow aeroplane,

With bicycle pedals and paper bag wings.

If we kick our feet together,

I’m sure we’ll make it fly.

 

Come, let’s run away; we’ll find a haunted wood and stay.

I’ve packed your bag,

With oranges and mangoes.

If we get the key at midnight,

I’m sure we’ll make it through the gate.

 

Step in the closet, don’t cry; I’ll sing your favorite lullaby.

In here with all the shoes,

The shouting seems less real.

If we’re really quiet,

I’m sure they’ll never find us.

 

Help me dig a little more; we’ll try to make a secret door.

I’ll tunnel us a home,

A quiet cave for you and me.

If we can pierce this red clay,

I’m sure we’ll find our own escape.

 

Darling, climb inside; this teacup is the place to hide,

From all the broken shards of glass,

And the words we can’t erase,

If we curl up in here,

I’m sure we’ll finally sleep in peace.

Reviews

[Steve]

This nicely inventive. Romantic too!

[Jonathan]

Very nice write I enjoyed reading it. The way it is written put me in some what in a trance. It kind of reminded me of the doors.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

there is a dual allure within the framework of this beautiful melancholy poetic that reads like music~ there is the hope and then there are the shadows collecting around the ankles that would bind the characters to the ground~
a well constructed array of images and thoughts~

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is sad in the sense of a child raising another child...
having to be a protector instead of being protected. It really
got under my skin to see a child being forced to be an adult.

[marisa starkilicious]

This was so lovely. You should show her it some time soon; I'm sure she would appreciate it. I especially like the last verse, it's sad and sweet at the same time. That's the overall feeling of the poem, actually.

This reminds me of my childhood. If only I had a sister like you. :D

-Marisa

[bluessadmood]

Ohh dear ,how i am glad ,my judgment is so in place
I really loved this ,such a flow and sentiments
such dreams and thoughts ..you could shoot to the moon
or any star you liked..this is so dreamy ..i am amazed
come fly with me we could build wings through the night
i will sing for you you will hear only me..nothing ever real
i will help dig a tunnel with me make a home ,a tunnel
just you and me,we could fly ,we could climb
in any tiny place we could hide
in here we find peace,with you i could finally sleep
such lovely words so tender ,so dreamy
lovely write..