Eden's Domestication

He named all creatures,

Or almost all.

 

And like a good woman should,

She adopted what was left.

 

The long-legged one with the flat, sturdy back

She fondly strokes and calls “ironing board.”

 

With magnetic trinkets

She rewards the tall, stocky one for cold protection.

 

“Oven,” she names the hot one;

“Freezer,” she names the cold.

 

She holds the hand of the one she calls vacuum,

It’s now the only hand she holds.

 

He has gone to his own realm,

With his own creatures

 

And she is left

With nothing more than a broom.

 

Author's Note

This was one of the first poems I ever wrote. Opinions would be greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[marisa starkilicious]

One of your first poems? I wish I had known as much as you had when I began writing. This is very interesting, and a bit melancholic. And I love how the title coincides with the poem. Wonderful, wonderful work. I'm afraid your poems are spamming my favorites.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are very true. I never thought like you did in this poem. Woman naming the appliances in the home. A very good poem. I like the twist you made with creation. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem brings the debate of the suffix "wo" to life.
Whether wo-man is the helper of man..or the equal partner.
The traditional role of the woman has been manipulated by
men who have tried to become powerful and dominate society.
It would appear that woman have been taken for granted since
the beginning. It is something that should be considered by all
men. I would consider woman to be equal partner of man...
even though...when we dont listen to women...we usually regret it. lol

[Nianque]

Wow, this is a spin on the view of Eden and their places in it. Great first poem !