Chronic legacy

Since the beginning there have always been wars and power struggles. The human race covets their self loathing and insecurities as if they were precious possessions. How about a fresh thought?

Chronic legacies of all shapes, colors and sizes,

loom in cosmic particles magnetized

and infused with other lives,

swirling within a storm of Ionic Souls

enduring entry after hapless entry,

of unrequited form, (not God not us).

Somewhere in between we stand naked

with brains thick in doubt, fear and loathing,

our potential waning while new strains

writhe and heave in a dance to sustain.

Inheritance and contributions nothing more

than a coagulated amalgam of ignorance and neglect,

encased in a wicked warp and weft

of lost love, crushed and crusted,

tinged with bitter short sightedness

and cursed with severe ocular deficiency.

“We did the best we could”, we say

without an inkling of understanding

of origin or destination and gelatinous

yearning precedes us, hopeless, yet there is no blame,

just generations of numbing wars,

migrations, cremations and infestations;

our lives lost long ago and swept away,

in hurricane’s of machinery and industrial hard labor,

a new kind of revolution and a striving

to transcend a past that has no future,

inside a life without imagination.

Corporate greed bludgeon flesh and bone to dust

while row homes redundantly regurgitate mediocrity

and chronic conditioning preempts what could be.

Scattered thinking precludes boredom,

and envy suffocates atonement

in decimated tunnels of blood and guts,

where money is the new God

and all the while children play alone……

But if all of this sounds too pathetic and grim,

like the stench of a dead skunk beneath your skin,

then think of a solution that’s simple and clear

and write a more positive poem

without shedding a tear.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This poem was so very dynamic,it was like being in midst of a whirlwind of thoughts,issues...there was so much to this poem.You have used a quite complex voice here,which also spells a disgust and disillusion with the human race as such,fro what i understand.I like the cosmic,surreal trait in your first stanza.There is such an all encompassing voice to your first few words,that it is amazing.I like how you say..Chronic legacies of all shapes, colors and sizes,

loom in cosmic particles magnetized

and infused with other lives,

swirling within a storm of Ionic Souls

enduring entry after hapless entry,

of unrequited form,
I did not intend copying and pasting the entire stanza but i couldn't help it..all of the words in it are so very good.
I like 'coagulated amalgam of ignorance and neglect'..also 'Somewhere in between we stand naked
with brains thick in doubt, fear and loathing'
I like how you have used 'severe ocular deficiency' on a wider note,it is an excellent metaphor for the general short sightedness of the human minds.
This poem is very fast paced,almost like an Eminem rap :p jokes apart what i want to say is,you have managed to put so many issues,so many problems afflicting the human race in general into a compact form,kudos for that..:)

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

I think the poem is intriguing and thought-provoking. It seems to explore themes of inheritance, neglect, and the human condition, and it does so in a way that is both vivid and evocative. The use of language is especially striking, with phrases like "cosmic particles magnetized and infused with other lives" and "encased in a wicked warp and weft of lost love" painting a powerful picture. Overall, I enjoyed reading the poem and found it to be both engaging and well-crafted.

[Emily B]

it sounds honest and true, and if my poetry shines like a light with hope and flights of angels, then yours is the mirror that reflects back our modern world

man's inhumanity is a pity

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

do you know what the saddest part is?~ that presented with your poem the majority of High school and University students would not comprehend the definition or usage of 80% of the vocabulary utilized~ the dumbing down of the nation hooked in solid and tight a few decades ago when megacorps decided it in their best interest to breed little consumers and thinkers~
how easily the society has been cajoled and lulled into base and ridiculous comforts that in the end now are coming to sink their teeth into the collective posterior of the human species~
how right you are with the last Stanza~ we can all bleed and bleed well within the parameters of composition when hope drips through the fingers~but I can see the dual sight where we dip with the other palm and catch those drops and reshape them for the new generations at hand~
a standing ovation from here my little corner of happy solitary girl who prefers mucking stables to the muck on the glass teat~
=)~ Bravo!

[Crowley]

This one is right up my alley. The first thing I thought of with the first couple of stanzas was the thought of Nested Holarchies as described by Ken Wilber....if you read it you will see why, the book is called a Theory of Everything, he is one of my fave thinkers because he has infused so much of others thoughts and feelings into his work. Any way I digress.....like usual....this piece makes an awesome point in a most eloquent and well phrased manner. I loved it.

[Ruth]

Excellent!
Thats the trouble, these days, people live in fear of the powers that be, I mean the hidden, dark powers, that I believe rule our Government and so on and on lol
This is awesome,. sometimes does us good to live in a positive shade for the day!
Awesome poem
xx

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"Somewhere in between we stand naked
with brains thick in doubt, fear and loathing,
our potential waning while new strains
ryth and heave in a dance to sustain.

{this is such true veracious line-this really caught my attention !!!}

"Corporate greed bludgeon flesh and bone to dust
while row homes redundantly regurgitate mediocrity
and chronic conditioning preempts what could be."

{yeah-you have captured the mood of the overwhelming avarice in this world}

{i really love sarcastic acrimonious tone of the last verse too-and
you truly do have talented way with language...i love this poem !!!}

james:-)