To Doug

Giving it a go... :) Ten lines, no more than three or four words each line...

My newest challenge
Across so many miles
Through my twisted wires

Write it this way
Learn a new trade
Practice with me
Virtually

No more than three
Or four, maybe

Here is my attempt.

Reviews

[Doug]

I was shocked to see you finished with the exercise already. Geez. It's good though. For me, I love visuals. For the next one I'd recommend something more visual. You get so much emotion out of visuals in poetry. Like the image of smoke seeping out of a girls mouth as she smokes. The images in your head set the tone of the type of girl she is. That would be my recommendation for your next one. And no big words like "love" or "hate" or "beauty". Describe those feelings instead.

[celyn]

i read the review from doug on your 'strange signage' poem,
and i'm really impressed by your response..
this is a great piece of well written work, i love it (: