The Other Side of This

Really short poem, but a lot of emotion.

The feeling that
You are mine to win
Is supplemented by
The feeling I'll have
When I lose you.

Reviews

[J. Elsie]

So everyone loves it and I do too, but I'll make suggestion (and probably get lynched by your mob of fans, here. smile) I think "The" at the beginning makes the feeling feel less possessive. I think you're better served by the word "This" which implies the feeling belongs to you and you're experiencing it now.

Otherwise, I agree with everyone. Its tight. Its sharp. Its true. Good write.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

masterfully arranged for the deepest impact~

[Cynthia]

You are right, its a short but full fill of emotion poem! Its a very good poem made by just 5 lines! It keeps me thinking about my past!

[Ashley Myers]

Aww i like this!!

[Stacey]

Proof that it doesn't take a whole lot of words to say so much!!! I think it's creative, clever and amazing when you can pull so much emotion from 6 lines. Loved the clean lines and wonderful message in this verse. Very clever and wonderful write!

[Jazmine T]

oh my goodness, so much said in so little words..pure joy to read

[emmajoy]

Great opening, wonderful close .. amazingly strong emotion throughout such a short piece of writing.

[Cherrie Palmer]

the glass goes from half full to half empty with one stroke of the pen

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

XD This is fantastic. I love how you've managed to pack so much into such a short little space. It's so sweet and meaningful, great job

[D S Rollins]

Beautiful and emotive, the last line really gets me!

[Marie Harrison]

Ah...sometimes we can forsee a heartache. But, we proceed anyway. Some relationships are worth it! Nice!