What If I Told You..

I hope not to tell

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Title; Told You

By: Joshua Casimier

Date: June 20, 2013

What if I told you that being dead was better than being alive.

What if I told you being republican or democratic made absolutely no sense and having the war over seas and the stock market finally start to make sense would be a better instead of lives and money lost. The great depression was no joke and lives can't be replaced when they subside.

What if I told you church was your home and god is what we should live by.

That the devil truly makes beautiful art.

While driving in the fast lane is not a good thing like having a blind man trying to remember the first step he took when he lost his site trying to recall where he landed, but he trust the beats of his heart.

What if I told you that hate makes no sense.

That the things we consider entertainment

Are actually subliminal.

It creates the inner criminal and changes all perspective.

That these cases that go on where the homeless can be solved there would be no need for a detective.

What if I told you that the world was ending every second.

That what bothers us the most as people.

Is not because of the he say she say, but because together we let them.

If I said the air is permanently polluted what would be concluded.

Would you hide in your fancy life that would fall to, or be so blinded by the facts to say that you didn't knew it.

If I told you how I feel would you understand that I feel it takes so much more to say that you are a woman or man.

I would say so.

Just know and don't ask if I told you.

What if I told you the things that you did not want to hear.

What if I told you that the problems that we point at other people for are actually in our mirror.

If the things that we fear.

Is the things that god is whispering in our ear of what we need to stop.

The disease spreading at millions of miles a second called ignorance.

Figure this that I suppose 9/11 was overlooked and hurricanes mean nothing.

That the pain we have caused earth has no worth.

Cause we skip each other and are so concern about having ourselves first.

What if I told you they plan to kill the president that all the life that is left on this earth is not cause of us, but because of the true angels that were heaven sent.

Though this earth is hell bound. One day when the sky opens up.

The one thing is safe to say the real people will be found.

All will rest every quote and verse will come to past.

You won't have to tell me if cause I told you.

Let me be one of the last.

Reviews

[Lee]

"The disease spreading at millions of miles a second called ignorance...
That the pain we have caused earth has no worth.
Cause we skip each other and are so concern about having ourselves first."

Whoa, goodness me... This is certainly something worth reading. I hope more people do.
First, I want to say thank you for writing this. I feel a little better knowing that there are others who think in this manner. Sometimes it can be alienating when people are more concerned with their personal lives (gossip/taxes/careers/media) and refuse to accept people who want to step outside that sheltered little bubble. Its hard at times.
Second, to help improve this, so that it offers more of an impact, you should go back through and edit. You have quite a bit of errors. It's more in the choice of words, you create sentences that don't necessarily make sense - structure wise. If you want since this is short I can help you with that if you'd like. Let me know.
Overall, you did really good. It's a well written piece emphasizing things people pretend not to hear about or notice. I'm glad you're shining a light here. You're not alone in thinking this way.

[PoeticFury]

Thanks I would like that.. no doubt..