Todd, This is so uniquely powerful and well-written; the irregular rhyme pattern enhances the wordplay, with words so well-chosen it's like they were meant for this piece, they are home where they belong. I could have done without the eye thing, my meds make me trippy enough. 8^) This goes into my library favorites, sir! Well done...dan
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Dan it's funny because before I posted the video to this piece I actually thought of you, but went w.. read moreDan it's funny because before I posted the video to this piece I actually thought of you, but went with it anyway as I feel it strengthens the illusionary message. Thank you for taking a look and your kind review.
This was very cool. Very original; I don't think I've ever read anything similar to this before. The strange thing is I didn't imagine an optical illusion, I thought it was some sort of dream so it's interesting to see how a reader can think of something different than what you intended :) Thank you very much for sharing this with me, it's wonderful!
I actually felt like I had been hypnotized by your powerful words...
"Within this single prism
we continue with; our own prison,
Hurting fully, loving partially
until it's done," Loved these lines...
Whew!!! My head is still spinning...Great work, my friend
Maumil
Hi Todd. I agree with Dan. I feel the passion in your words and you manage to create questions for the reader to ponder, long after they have read!!! Really a great write, a provocative read and an after trail of musing . . . alf
Very awesome piece... had to turn the music down it was trippin me out! lol Love the irregular rhyme scheme... it really helped the way you played with the words. Good work
I enjoyed this poem. You left me thoughts and possibilities.
"Take it all in, then spin, the fright
Everything will turn to white,
the function of the art
and scripture exists,"
Your description create vision and thoughts. My kind of poetry that leave the reader with questions. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Todd, This is so uniquely powerful and well-written; the irregular rhyme pattern enhances the wordplay, with words so well-chosen it's like they were meant for this piece, they are home where they belong. I could have done without the eye thing, my meds make me trippy enough. 8^) This goes into my library favorites, sir! Well done...dan
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Dan it's funny because before I posted the video to this piece I actually thought of you, but went w.. read moreDan it's funny because before I posted the video to this piece I actually thought of you, but went with it anyway as I feel it strengthens the illusionary message. Thank you for taking a look and your kind review.
This reminds me of looking back on a dream and trying to decipher it ,,what happened and what the underlying meaning was!!
Love the image...the write and the optical illusion reminded me of Alice in wonderland! A great combinations! love it
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Down the rabbit hole. Thanks for taking the time to read and review my work.
~peace, .. read moreDown the rabbit hole. Thanks for taking the time to read and review my work.
~peace, Todd
9 Years Ago
LOl yes! I really liked this write...you have a very unique style that i enjoy reading! :)
I write what I feel with honesty, and integrity. I love art in all it's forms, especially poetry and multi-media. I love to read, watch movies, play music, and study comparative mythology. I hope to o.. more..