SO Tired...

I listened to The Beatles, my mom, my wife... and myself.

So tired;

I snored aloud last night,
I slept.
I let go of my thoughts,
while the world only wept.

A peace of tranquility,
For the living alive
Nonexistent really,
Pennies for shillings, we only can strive

Like a dog eating grass
To settle his stomach,
I wretch and gag
To bring forth my coming.

Hop, skip and jump,
From dust to infinity
I was born, as you
And hate all discriminity.

I've been bitten as
Mosquitos in rain,
Allowing things to settle
And wait for the pain...

Make up a word
Just to be heard
And woe to you
The proud and the few

Ye who judge me
For, the truth is in view
only to be yourself...
To keep some form of granted health.

An insurance demanded
As told or payed
Of life for the stupid?
I'm here to stay

Snoring again and again
Few and between
I haven't rested
From the very beginning...

Author's Note

Reviews

[dan]

Todd, First of all, a Beatles song I'd NEVER HEARD BEFORE! It fits perfectly with the words to the poem, which adopts a tone throughout that is practically a book definition of the word tired (or fatigue). "An insurance demanded As told or paid Of life for the stupid? I'm here to stay," this is a declaration of purpose that you fly like a flag, making a defiant statement...brilliant. Another fine write to add to your impressive list of winners. Bravo! take care...dan

[modtoddinc]

I have come to an understanding of living and expressing in the moment. Thank you for your time, effort and thought my friend.

~peace, Todd

[sereenaoutloud]

Oh we all get so tired with the day to day, early hours, sleepless nights ..the write sounds like how my husband feels,,(but much more beautifully put) ..often in the morning.. over the much needed coffee.. when i have vented his ear off lol..
love how you weave the tiredness though out!!
Oh and the song...well Hello? lol who doesn't like the Beatles...superb!!

[AaronFreitas]

This poem had really good flow to it my friend. I enjoyed it very much. I know what it's like to be tired and you just need that rest to reset your mind and let your thoughts rest. Good work

[Maumil Mehraj]

You have been so bold and direct with you expression here, Todd! True sometimes we do get tired os life due to varied reasons and you've put that beautifully in a poem.
Its always wonderful to read your work!
~Maumil

[SCRIBBLER]

Such a dark and emotive poem my friend. UMMMMMMMMM....MMMM. I can't find words to describe this. I usually can relate with poems that touch my mind. But this poem just touched my heart. I hope that you never leave this website and keep on entertaining with your poetry. You are a type of writer who can do well in almost all genres and situations

~Scribble On

[~]

ugh.. so much darkness inside this one. a poem that draws out the fangs of fatigue and plunders on the resilience of the soul. I hope the snoring dissipates and your energy will return to you. :D

[modtoddinc]

I love your comment and insights. I did not feel dark, nor think of this as a dark piece until rereading it after your comment. I see it now. Cool. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

~Peace, Todd

[wordman]

sounds like a good taste of depression my friend,and the song topped it off

[modtoddinc]

Feeling pretty good these days, but welcome all interpretations as compliment to my art. Thanks.
read moreFeeling pretty good these days, but welcome all interpretations as compliment to my art. Thanks.

~peace, Todd

[wordman]

it was a compliment my friend

[alf]

Hi Todd. This is kind of like a response to the Beatles lyrics and I like what you have done with it!! I can almost hear this being sung, though the tune eludes me outside my head. Great write, alf

[modtoddinc]

Interesting interpretation, I like it. Unless I am using a song within a poem or writing from the inspiration of a particular song. I usually pick the music after I write, which was the case here... the inspiration for this poem came from a conversation with my mother, where she stated she was tired. My wife works odd early hours.(3am), so she is often tired... and I then today, I happened to be out in nature walking the dog, when the words for this piece came to me... the song was an afterthought, but fits nicely with the poem in my opinion. Thank you for reading and commenting on my artwork.

~peace, Todd

[modtoddinc]

P.S. My wife also informed me that I was snoring when she left this morning. :) (I rarely snore, but last night I slept hard as a rock!)

[alf]

Ah, now I understand why she chooses her hours of work!! I'm surprised you hadn't a song in mind, even with the Beatles' influence this is so lyrical!!

[modtoddinc]

ha ha ha, thank you sir. :)

[Jamestown]

Great write, great band!
Wonderful wording and great flow,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[modtoddinc]

Appreciated my friend...

~peace, Todd