Hi Todd. You have made magic here! The tune is as haunting as the words and the whole melds together at a truly sublime level. I read, read as I listened, then went back to read for a third time. There is an almost mystic theme to the poem, enhanced by the music, sure, but still there without the accompaniment. Love this, and it tells me the depth of your love for your wife. thank you for sharing this with me, alf
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9 Years Ago
Alf thank you very much for your kind and meaningful review, I am honored. I am proud of this piece,.. read moreAlf thank you very much for your kind and meaningful review, I am honored. I am proud of this piece, and yet feel the need to strive more towards the love I feel; the love I wish to always express to my wife, and the love I genuinely feel for life itself; art is my avenue and I hope to continue to develop and grow in my expression and craft.
~peace, Todd
9 Years Ago
For those who truly aspire, a time will be made for them in the universe. I wish you good luck, my f.. read moreFor those who truly aspire, a time will be made for them in the universe. I wish you good luck, my friend, though I believe luck has little to do with your future success!
Amazing poetry my friend.
"We can only enter separately
You ~ Me
Family"
Above lines are perfect and beautiful. Thank you for the good song and outstanding poetry.
Coyote
A very beautiful poem indeed Todd. I wish you could have written this in 'collaboration' with another poet and it could have been considered in the Collab. contest.
However, all that aside, this outstanding piece is a winner! I loved it. I can't find words to describe what It think about this. Truly wonderful work! Music a perfect accompainment!
Fabulous piece of work and yes you should be proud of it!
You described love in the purest form and is very well penned,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you Sir, I am grateful for your kind review and visit.
You capture the essence of love in its purest form..the poetic expression is stunning within this lovely penned piece of poetry..nice work, Todd..
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Thank you Fran, I worked very hard on this piece and still feel there is further to go. Very gratefu.. read moreThank you Fran, I worked very hard on this piece and still feel there is further to go. Very grateful for your kind review.
Todd, Your writing in this piece is impeccable. The lines of verse, how they reflect off of each other is stunning. I honestly have to flip through my thesaurus to find adjectives worthy of this written gemstone.
The piano brings the whole piece to fruition (I was going to say that it brings the piece together - - but it is ALREADY so together). I feel it's woefully inadequate to tell you that this is going into my library favorites. It should go into the Library of Congress. Someone should publish this piece. Immediately. Thank you for sending me the RR, I'd have hated to miss out on this. take care...dan
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9 Years Ago
Dan, thank you my friend, for your kindness. This was a poem of love with love, for love, and in my .. read moreDan, thank you my friend, for your kindness. This was a poem of love with love, for love, and in my own mind still short of the expressions I wish to relay, but we strive for perfection in hopes that we create something beautiful, not perfection itself, for true beauty lies in the imperfections, but for the aesthetic of the art. As I indicated in my own review above, I feel there is more to be said about my personal love, and love in general, as I also believe that every poem in history together, leaves room to strive for ultimate expression, and so I continue on my journey through art now and for as long as I breathe, with gratitude and humility.
Thank you also for saying it should be published, it warms my heart, for I, as well as many others, dream of such things. (I have made it a personal goal to get one poem, or piece of writing published in 2015) This has been a lifelong dream for me, and I've kept it a secret for most of my life. I finally realized life is too short to keep secrets for long. I will continue to practice and put my work 'out there' for criticism and review in hopes that I will reach my dream.
Hi Todd. You have made magic here! The tune is as haunting as the words and the whole melds together at a truly sublime level. I read, read as I listened, then went back to read for a third time. There is an almost mystic theme to the poem, enhanced by the music, sure, but still there without the accompaniment. Love this, and it tells me the depth of your love for your wife. thank you for sharing this with me, alf
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Alf thank you very much for your kind and meaningful review, I am honored. I am proud of this piece,.. read moreAlf thank you very much for your kind and meaningful review, I am honored. I am proud of this piece, and yet feel the need to strive more towards the love I feel; the love I wish to always express to my wife, and the love I genuinely feel for life itself; art is my avenue and I hope to continue to develop and grow in my expression and craft.
~peace, Todd
9 Years Ago
For those who truly aspire, a time will be made for them in the universe. I wish you good luck, my f.. read moreFor those who truly aspire, a time will be made for them in the universe. I wish you good luck, my friend, though I believe luck has little to do with your future success!
I can't find word to describe this poem. It is one of the best poetry i've ever ready. It reminded me of my own childhood. Love it.
Thanks, Todd
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9 Years Ago
Thank you for visiting and commenting on my work, your review honors me and I am grateful. read moreThank you for visiting and commenting on my work, your review honors me and I am grateful.
I am fascinated by art. The way one see's another persons creation is a wonderful and amazing experience. I wrote this poem with the intention to express my love for my wife, something beyond first love, and love of family (particularly the birth of a child)... As always, I started from my sacred space... attempting to flush out all outside influences and distractions. When I create, I like it to come from an organic natural place within me, so the poem, (or whatever) is the most honest and true form it can be. Often times the final result is not what I initially intended; and I believe this may have happened again with this poem. For me it will always have the meaning I intended, but it also takes on a meaning of its own. (As does all true art) Upon revisiting this piece, I see it more in its entirety than I did when I wrote it and first posted it... for example the song I chose, Ser le fil, Composed by Yann Tiersen, from the film Amelie, meaning "Just in time", or "in the nick of time", is beautiful in my opinion, but changes the over-all meaning of the poem for me too, as well as reading comments from other's interpretations... I see the poem in a whole new way. I love this. Thanks to everyone for reading my work and interpreting it in a way that is meaningful to you personally. I am deeply grateful. Todd
I write what I feel with honesty, and integrity. I love art in all it's forms, especially poetry and multi-media. I love to read, watch movies, play music, and study comparative mythology. I hope to o.. more..