Soulful nonsense

There lies my scattered mind - on the ocean floor…

Between the waves of joy.

Lovers at noon, at midnight, in this nonsense post-war

Slow dancing in our homemade Troy.

 

To hurt me, you should know what to say,

So don’t waste those grenades of fluff.

Just take a walk in this satin disarray

And see if you can call out my bluff.

 

But anyway, complicated obviousness they say,

Well hidden layer of the universal delayer,

 Only halfway till the end of today

And yet, am I a player, payer or betrayer?

 

How to get out of my mind

When the mind gets out of me first…

How to surprise what is already predefined

This mysterious script, so well versed…

 

And who can tell me

Where lays the hidden truth - in the middle of a lie?

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[willweb]

There is something quite surreal about this piece of writing. It is as if it floats before my eyes, questioning me, asking me why I read and why I don't. There is a breeze to this poem as well and it whirls about looking pretty and luring the eye to the beauty it reveals. This was fantastic Ana.

[Ana B.]

Thank you Will for the wonderful words, once again, so glad to see you around ;)

[lightsong]

Oh dear! relationship can be a REAL challenge. up and down. ebb and flow. joy and pain. dull and passionate . trusted and confused. it is ok because many times it's not about us or our partners but more about life and how life changes. to trust ourselves, and then have a trusted partner who we can communicate clearly with in a deep and aware level what can take us out of the tide. your emotions here are changing like the tides, to each state You've experienced. your way is unique to write about it. Best Wishes for You🌸

[lightsong]

I really love the waterfall drawing, I forget to say this :>

[duff]

Wow. Some killer lines. I feel a bit of necessary romantic venom. A skillful hand wrote this.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the generous review Duff ))) pretty insightful in a few words, thanks :))

[duff]

My pleasure to read your work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"take a walk in my satin disarray" love that line...somewhere within all the lies of relationships...there are some truths that come out of them as well.
the oxymoron of "complicated obviousness"---
love it, oh sometimes we complicate love so much...when in its simplest form, it is just a mutual affection that finds itself developing for the good or in some cases, the bad.
I am so glad to read you again, my friend.
j.

[Ana B.]

Thank you so much for the wonderful words dear Jacob :)

[Chris]

It's good to listen to your thoughts again... missing situational awareness comes to mind, but the clarity of the moment behind my eyes tasted during personal "life experience" holds understanding.

[Ana B.]

Thanks for listening to my thoughts Chris)))

[Chris]

It's good to listen to your thoughts again... missing situational awareness comes to mind, but the clarity of the moment behind my eyes tasted during personal "life experience" holds understanding.

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness, first poem I have read of yours and I really liked it. So clever..
Your 4th verse is really good but then again all your verses are excellent.
In the middle of a lie...another fabulous line..
And the waterfall artwork is great too...I am an artist and appreciate reading a poem with art attached.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Lisa!! It's been a while for me, so thank you for the warm words.
Stay blessed,
AnaB

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome..I am fairly new to submitting any of my poetry anywhere so this has been quite an adventure for me.
Hope you will find the time to read mine.
Lisa