After ''later''

Should I stay awake in this dream

While the thinkers harvest the Wind of Fate...

This rain of tears I feel within

Slowly feeds the ocean of this untold wait.

Mind phantoms are baffling this affair.

Me - still haven’t found the color of my breath...

Lonely hands trying to sculpt some air,

Made a beautiful castle, yet, closer to death.

And now I’m starting to miss

The dream I didn't  get to dream.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

First, Ana ✍

Your gorgeous artwork choices sweep me awayyy, your title tugs me in … then, the music wraps me in its ethereal melody; but, nothing of it all touches more deeply than the smooth blending of magic that wakens one's senses by the sheer virtue of your spellbinding enchantment of imagery and metaphoric word-painting upon the canvas of our intellectual, spiritual, and emotional depths of enthrallment.
To select one part over the other to highlight (for me) would be an impossibility without taking from the whole; though, I'd love the final two line to rhyme inline with the rest, perhaps:
"And, I’m starting to miss the dream
I never got to dream."
Sort of, Poe-esque … oh, but how wonderfully you pen the smoothness of syntax, rhythm, and flow, with spot-on rhymes, and pristine punctuation … you're a skilled poetess to admire and be sought after.
I feel in this a deep yearning for that which you never experienced, or is it of impending death, or is it that I simply am so unrefined its above my head?
Whatever it might be, I love the way your poetic mind, heart, and soul dance together upon the page.

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Ana, for sharing You with Us! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Ana B.]

Wow Richard, your review left me speechless.
Your insight is quite acurate, because there are days when we think about death, not like about an enemy, but a motivator of conclusions...
Thank you so much for your very generous words, and mindblowing praise. Stay blessed my friend.

[Richard🖌]

That, I shall, Ana … you as-well 😏

[barleygirl]

Perfect graceful powerful way to tell a story thru imagery (((HUGS)))

[Ana B.]

Thank you my dear. Hugs ))))))))))

[Davidgeo]

This is a series of increasingly enigmatic lines that, when read all at once, kinda hurt my brain.

English isn't even your primary language. It's unfair that you can do this and I can't.

You're a criminally underrated writer on this site.

[Ana B.]

I have no idea how do you even know that English is not my primary language!
I know I should work much harder to get publicly noticed, even here on this site.It's been a while since I put some effort.
Thank you for the very generous opinion David!

[Davidgeo]

I can tell by the way you write that you speak more than one language and that your baseline isn't English. That's a good thing with you because your general logic is sound enough to bridge the gap between the natural shortcomings the different languages inherently present which allows you to take advantage of the stylistic advantage's. My guess is that you're not totally aware of this ability, but you do have it none the less. It puts you at a huge intellectual advantage when you express yourself creatively. Of course, I could be wrong... this is all just speculation based on having read you over a relatively long period of time.

[Ana B.]

Observant. It's funny how thoughts are different depending on the language you think them in. It can actually be an obstacle for me to express myself clear, when i begin thinking in one language, and then somewhere along the way it changes into some
Russian and of course my native language. And you're right, it does give me an advantage, especially when writing, confusing as it is, of course it could mean i have a personality disorder or something, but these days I like to think positive.

[Davidgeo]

Ha... personality disorder. I think most people who think for themselves will always seem to have a personality disorder. Sometimes intellectual competence will seem like a personality disorder, it all depends on who you're interacting with in that moment. It's unfortunate but, most people are kinda stupid in at least one way or another... to include most smart people.

[Ana B.]

haha, you're not wrong.Maybe people as an individual are somewhat perspicacious, if they put the animal instincts aside, and yet, as a nation, the same mistakes are made and the same patterns are taken over and over again. At this point, having some faith in our civilization seems foolish even. But that's just my opinion.

[emmajoy]

There a re times when fl ying skyward seems to be sole com panion when sleeping. But, then comes the waking, wanting renewal, per haps.. but find ing need is worse.. perhaps sliding away.

Beautif ully expressed as ever is, but, oh so s ad. So hope that starligh t treats you better sooner than s oon. Hugs

[Ana B.]

Got caught up in the melancholy's dance of words...Thank you for the thoughtful review my dear ;) All is well, better than some days, worse than others...you know, as always )))

[emmajoy]

Am here if ever .. .. ..

[m3lody mae]

This is a very well written write. I liked and enjoyed this

[Ana B.]

Thank you :))

[m3lody mae]

not a problem

[David Klay]

This is an exquisite write..

[Ana B.]

Thank you David.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

feels like someone who knows they are fated to die soon, maybe of disease....the second stanza just blew me away...so beautiful...
j.

[Ana B.]

It does feel that way....
Thank you very much Jacob :)