Truthful pretense

Sweet darkness, timidly

play your ghostly notes

Of this unfinished symmetry,

As I live on borrowed quotes.

 

Tears of liquid sovereignty inside -

Forever unspoken tales…

Behind bogus happiness I hide

Chasing holographic trails…

 

And if the dead can dance

Why can’t I do it too?

Tempests of hollow romance

I have yet to subdue…

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[KWP]

OOh that's lovely, melodic and dark. It's hot pot of all what's not and all that can be. Unfortunately they separate like oil to water, whatever can we add to 'mix to combine'. Very nicely done Ana X

[Ana B.]

Very well said :) Thank you KWP :)

[barleygirl]

This is thought-provoking . . . the title is well-stated & I love playing with the contrasts of life, as you've done so well here. Your rhyme & rhythm is well done & sophisticated with complex word choices. The best part is that it sounds very original to me (((HUGS)))

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the beautiful review :) Hugs!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Love the musical reference to 'The Double Life of Veronique' (Fascinating French Movie/score) - your poetic words reflecting an unusual romance (perhaps with a puppeteer who may be able to facilitate her existential issues). Very well penned … :-)

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Phill :) I'm glad you caught the ''The double life of Veronique'' fragrance :)

[Tony Jordan]

So sad but not self-pitying. Resigned. How does one make resignation seem so dignified as you've done here Ana?
You choreograph words - we all have our 'place' - lol

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the awesome words my friend :)

[Kesha]

Where do you find such lovely images? They're sooo pretty. And I love how your poem just dances, It's truly beautiful, I am in awe of your writing

[Ana B.]

I have a thing for watercolor paintings :) Anytime i come across one that i like, i'm all like: ''hmmm, i should somehow use this in my poems''... Thank you very much for the warm words dear Kesha :)

[Kesha]

That's awesome and you're welcome :)

[Great Aunt Astri]

I love this well constructed poem of bitter-sweet contemplation. Clever words and a beautiful painting. I hope those 'tempests of hollow romance' get duly subdued for her.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much :)

[z.chéri]

I love this. It is written so wonderfully! Keep writing! x :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you :)

[Davidgeo]

The living can never dance like the dead... silly lady.

Romance is only overrated when your single... it's always darkest before the dawn... etc. etc.

I lost my train of thought, the ending reminded me of the "corpse bride" too much. I think I'm going to watch that tonight.

[Ana B.]

lol. i don't know why, but reading this cracked me up a lot. Had to try my hand at sort of romance, people dig that stuff... always a pleasure TK :)

P.S. i never saw the ''corpse bride'', is it legit?

[Davidgeo]

I think you'd enjoy "Corpse Bride" quite a bit.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

okay, Ana....i have to be honest here...

besides loving the entire piece and its theme...

to me, the first stanza is so brilliant and is a poem in itself....

j.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the wonderful words Jacob :)

[Mr.Writer]

A chilling and somberful poem...
I felt lots of emotion and thought in this...
Well done, keep it up!! :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you Mr Writer :)

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)