Six tulips

Beautiful lies in a look

Like smiling fire bombs

Stuck in my blue notebook

As I outline kismet’s palms.

 

The sky is bruising.

And this theory of a novel

Has become impossibly confusing

Yet cannot sway this lovely ravel

 

Of tangles words

Cause that’s the space between us

And so I wink, and The Wind nods -

no one distorts the truth like he does

 

Except the mind.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful display, totally disarming, yet, delightful.

In itself, your poem seems token thoughts between two people. But, for me, they defy outsiders to see the entire and clear relationship.
Those last few words.. are.. magical, deceptive, a puzzle with a smile, perhaps.

'And so I wink, and The Wind nods - ~ no one distorts the truth like he does ~ ~ Except the mind.' Yes!

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the warm words dear Emma! :)

[writ rajat]

as the lines flow,
my heart get glow,
i read it slow but laud,
because it is above the cloud

[Ana B.]

this made me smile
you certainly got style.
gift beauty to people
in this world so feeble.

Thank you :)

[writ rajat]

can we become friend ,
this review is not an end ,

[Kelly Scheppers]

It reads like a classic for all time, Ana!

[Ana B.]

Thank you Kelly :)

[aLittlePain]

You wield words with a graceful pen a gentle touch, which feels almost seductive to me. I love the metaphor Ana, and the fact the the verses can be read from bottom to top and still read beautifully and with as much depth... what the funk! Did you mean to do that is there a fancy technical name for that? Everything about this is writing is exceptional, one of those pieces that are timeless...the image, font/font colour all make this one very dope package. R xo

[Ana B.]

haha, from the bottom to top? That's a complete accident from my part.Thank you very much for the amazing review Ray :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Nice! I enjoyed the double meaning which intertwined between the verse. That which you write is subtle in well chosen words yet so true. What if you placed a comma after "beautiful lies"? This to would make beauty the entity which is the one lying. Just one man's opinion.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the suggestion dear Michael :)

[Giulia King]

Another beautiful poem, Ana! I loved the first verse :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you sweet Gullia :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Nice poem. And I loved the image as tulips are my favorite flower and the title caught my attention.

[Ana B.]

Thank you Najam Us Saher :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're most welcome ☺

[zaisham9393]

You are s talented!
The choice of words is amazing and I love the metaphor as well !

Thank you for sharing Ana :)!

[Ana B.]

Thank you dear friend :)

[Abraham George]

Beautiful lies in a look
Like smiling fire bombs

nice metaphor , you can easy make people believe whatever lies you with the help of a smile. Lot of people smiling is also a big lie. so wonderful words and expressions

[Ana B.]

Thank you for stopping by Abraham :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Beautiful lies in a look
Like smiling fire bombs
Stuck in my blue notebook
As I outline kismet’s palms."

The first thing which drew me in your poem was the colour 'cause it's actually my favourite ;) but I liked the first stanza best! "Smiling firebombs" is an interesting metaphor you used here.

Loved reading it! Beautiful work as always by you, Ana :)

[Ana B.]

hahaha thank you a lot Yumna, i think i heard that particular metaphor in a song, or maybe something similar, so can't take the full credit unfortunately :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, you can take the credit of incorporating it beautifully in your write 😉
You're welcome, Ana! A pleasure always 😇

[Ana B.]

hahah, thanks :D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Bienvenido 😊