Abandoned flakes

Didn’t have the heart

To stop the rain

That’s splitting apart

Placidity’s frame…

 

That rests on the table…

With photos in darkness…

The darkness that’s faithful

To the beautiful oddness

 

That adorns this succession

Of smoky evenings…

Wearing that same expression…

Rain sorting those feelings

 

That aren’t mine for keeping.

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Aphy!]

The font and the whole structure is very creative and nice. Adds on to the peaceful flow of the actual poem so I found that really nice. Overall this was a good piece

[Ana B.]

wow, i was revisiting my poems and discovered this review. Sorry it took so long, but thank you for the lovely words :)

[closed]

i really like the color and font

i thought it really brought this to life

[Ana B.]

Thank you :)

[Adam Adams]

Loved the adornment of rain & feelings (seasonal changes/vibrant heartbeats). Very thoughtful you're with words, your words're seemed very productive with excellence of insights ov'r "flakes" -- the heart quakes. Lol Nice imagery. Keep it up ;)

[Ana B.]

Thank you for your words Adams :)

[Adam Adams]

Occasionally, I often enjoy being at your pages. Something deep .. very profound-ed, I do find deep in your words to have my time cooled off with soft breeze of innovation.

[Ana B.]

Thank you again :)

[Chris]

Such a melancholy mood... sigh

[Ana B.]

it's autumn...

[Chris]

Very true... picnic time and good walks...

[Miss Sharon]

Beautifully written my dear with a good message that holds the reader's attention easily. Nice job! ~Sharon

[Ana B.]

thank you dear Sharon :)

[Miss Sharon]

Always my pleasure Ana! ~SP

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Feelings are always connected to something else and so, when that something else has gone (a love gone sour, death, separation, etc...) a part of those feelings go with it, and never really fully belong to us any more...still, it doesn't mean we cannot cry over the remnants...this takes me to a familiar place...thanks for sharing, Ana

[Ana B.]

Thank you for stopping by FT :)

[MsJewel]

Beautiful flow of words as if caught in a melancholy rain...
Wonderful writing my friend

Julie

[Ana B.]

Thank you sweet Julie :)

[JMKane117]

I wonder what the last line means? I like the poem, it's got a numb and dark feel to it. The poem flows, which is what I like most. Great work!

[Ana B.]

well, different people find different meanings in the same words....thanks for stopping by

[Pushkar Prabhat]

beautiful......profound and clever expression.........
awesome writing as always.......
i loved it!!!
:)

[Ana B.]

Thank you Pushkar :)

[charlie]

This has nice rhythm, Ana B. It varies a little by line 11, but I don't think it detracts from your poem, too much. The mood comes through - a kind of stoicism, and acceptance; a letting go; a freeing up of oneself... Sometimes there is just no other way.

I like this.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for stopping by Charlie.