Abandoned flakes

Didn’t have the heart

To stop the rain

That’s splitting apart

Placidity’s frame…

 

That rests on the table…

With photos in darkness…

The darkness that’s faithful

To the beautiful oddness

 

That adorns this succession

Of smoky evenings…

Wearing that same expression…

Rain sorting those feelings

 

That aren’t mine for keeping.

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

to keep, to want, or to have. Non really matter as rain drops come and go, but how do you know if they aren't the same from yesterday or say one year before? As they evaporate and ascend into the clouds once again to fall and tickle your face like that time long ago, in hopes you remember them. And there they sit

[Ana B.]

the whole thing is just an ouroboros ... i guess when we'll break the circle, then we will now.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we don't own feelings, we simply borrow them for a time...

"the beautiful oddness" is interesting to me...i just read dean koontz' novel, Saint Odd....

the last in the series...he had an Oddness...a beautiful oddness.

[Ana B.]

Hmm, never heard about that specific Odness....though, those who perceive it as beautiful are the lucky ones. Thank you Jacob.

[Girl With A Pen]

Wonderful! Very detailed and beautiful written

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Such a melodious piece of work. Very beautiful!

Welcome back Ana :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Most Welcome :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Your poems use to revolve around nature and this poem is no exception... i always wonder how you can relate nature to your feelings and present it like this... another brilliant work....

[Ana B.]

thank you!

[CD Campbell]

Love the second stanza and the use of darkness. Doesn't sound forced. Cheers. CD

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much CD :)

[Daisy]

Wonderful poem ana.... good job

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Daisy :)

[Beccy]

Such a beautiful flow to this; and the ending is like the moment when the rain stops.

Really enjoyed the read. Beccy.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Beccy :)

[BL]

Feelings laid bare, I like the atmosphere of this one it lingers in my mind

[Ana B.]

Thank you Be :)

[Chris]

Was good to revisit and pause in thought

[Ana B.]

Thank you Chris :)