Ruthless

a WRATH compilation

Dance with me.

Later I’ll lie on that bed of nails.

I’ll wait till the sighs' phonology

Will slowly die in the quiet exhales…

 

Cause even nights have to breathe

Patiently serving the sky to the moon…

Shying away from the too loud grief

That’s immersed in the emptiness’ fume…

 

Even when all has run out

I still want to dance…

In the middle of the phantom crowd,

Chattel to those illusive hands…

  

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Falcon1]

Loving the pain if feel in the first two lines Lying on a bed of nails Oh Thats so appealing.

[Ana B.]

Thanks Falcon :)

[APOORVA]

Cause even nights have to breathe
Patiently serving the sky to the moon…
LOVED THESE LINES

[Ana B.]

Thank you :)

[Nicholas Shea]

"Cause even nights have to breathe
Patiently serving the sky to the moon…
Shying away from the too loud grief
That’s immersed in the emptiness’ fume…"

This is REALLY cool. I think you've got a great style of writing!

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Nicholas :)

[duff]

Highly creative and unique. There is intrigue to feast on and it just works. There aren't any filler lines. All of it ties together. Powerful lines. Great job

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Duff :)

[duff]

You bet Ana!

[Lemonade]

I couldn't help but peruse more of your library after the pleasure that was Apathy. I like your style quite a bit.

The commanding, yet yearning voice behind "dance with me" in the first line was immediately captivating, and I have to say that whole verse was really well done.

I would swap the apostrophe from "night's" in the second verse to "sighs" in the first, as sigh is spoken about as if possessing its phonology, while nights is not. Apostrophes indicate possession, and placing them wrongly can alter or disturb meanings.

I will certainly be returning to read this again. Well done.

[Ana B.]

Thank you. You give great suggestions that are very much appreciated. Have a lovely day, Lemonade.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful artwork and strong description. Left the reader with the want of the dance and not concern with the payment. Thank you Ana for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

Thank you John, for always being kind to me :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Ana.

[Misery]

Yes, let us dance in the early evening, for the night will find us alone with all of our inner tormentors.
A ruthlessly beautiful creation, dear Ana.

[Ana B.]

thank you very much Kevin :)

[Misery]

You are welcome, Ana.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Of the two I read and this one...you have a style and that resonates on the canvas...like the pictures that accompany these words...this again like the second one has the vibe...and strikes the reader...from point blank range...yet gives a bit in the end clause...

[Ana B.]

hmm, thank you for the beautiful review Glen.