If so...

If so...

A Poem by Ana B.

Following the time’s sweeping meander

In the kingdom of my thoughts…

With streets that smell like coriander

And roads of chili sauce…

 

Counting the seconds

Until time will cease to exist…

In a world with no weapons

Just a formless mist…

 

Or maybe there was never time

Only it’s form…

The stars playing mime

With the emptiness’s storm…

 

 

 

© 2015 Ana B.


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Love, love love the first stanza.. who would have thought coriander and chilli sauce would work so well together?!!.. :)))
Wel done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

:) Thank you very much
chilli sauce roads... Love that...
The flow of this poem is superb Ana...yes a world with no weapons..if only!!
Great write girlie! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Thank you sweet girlie :)
Love the combination of chili sauce street-roads & emptiness of storms. It contains much depth withing words. Well pen'd!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Thank you dear.
I absolutely love this poem Ana, I want to walk those roads of chili sauce, In a world with no weapons
Just a formless mist…an incredible piece of poetry as is, The stars playing mime
With the emptiness’s storm… this is by far one of your best ever and lets face it that is really saying something, wonderful poetry my lovely friend :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Thank you my wonderful friend :)

Measured complexity, fine lines drawn between is and might be. Wandering wondering, a nice work of poetic whimsies. Exceptional.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Thank you Siegried :)
I really enjoyed reading this poem. There's a subtle placed message within which makes it all the more powerful. I believe there is something rather eerie about looking up at stars that now cease to exist. the sky is full of star ghosts, haha!
Ellen :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

:) true to that, thank you very much Ellen :)
The way you beautifully inter-mixed formal and informal words in your poetry bring out a fresh outlook. Such poems always refresh the reader and give an important message subtly as well. I appreciate your work. Good luck. Happy writing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Rahul :)
Rahul Chhabra

9 Years Ago

You are welcome. If you have some time to spare, do review my writing too.
Very good song and powerful poetry. You left the reader with something to think about.
"Counting the seconds
Until time will cease to exist…
In a world with no weapons
Just a formless mist…"
I like some old poem words. The world will go out with a whisper, not a explosion. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear John, indeed , i agree :)
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome Ana.
this is my favourite o f yours for sure and absolutely - love it - all of it - speak to me it does - great XX

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

:) Thank you very very much my friend :D
love the taste of chili sauce in chinese foods and how well it would go with a peaceful world, if only we could put away the hate and war and live on streets of coriander...Willard said pretty much what my reaction was to this lovely piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the wonderful words Jacob.

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