Pulse

Searching the galaxies

For some semblance of order

The stars and their families

Beyond the imagination’s border…

 

I don’t blame the voices that I hear

Inside of my head…

They’re helpless against the vices that are near

Convolved in infrared…

 

Family ties

Are the strangest thing…

That you can deny

Yet cannot escape their ring…

 

And as a daughter of this era

I am bound by time…

Undetected by the infinity’s sclera

Yet following its design…

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Unfortunately, we're bound by time. I would like to travel to the stars when it's possible, discover and experience life on other planets. I guess I'll have to satisfy myself by travelling inside my fantasy about all these worlds. Thank you for sharing this excellent poem. :) Rudi

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the wonderful words dear Rudi :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

You're welcome, Ana. :)

[sereenaoutloud]

love this write and love pink floyd too so this was a double hit for me lol
Awesome Girlie! :)

[Ana B.]

Thanks a lot Girlie :)

[sereenaoutloud]

always welcome... really loved this one!!

[Devons]

"And as a daughter of this era
I am bound by time…
Undetected by the infinity’s sclera
Yet following its design…"
That last stanza is very good indeed, a really imaginative angle of perspective. "Undetected" gives a real sense of immense un-knowable power. And this ties into the mysteriously 'missable' (somehow) suggestion that the great cosmos is tuned-in to our brains, and that ultimately we are in its control somewhat. That's how I read it. I like that concept very much, despite it being impossible to prove (or maybe because it is).
I wasn't sure about this poem at first, but I read it over again and I'm glad I did. There's a lot more here than meets the eye - it's funny sometimes how it can seem as if you're not being told anything, and yet then you realise afterwards that you are. I think something like that happened to me with this poem.
I was attracted by the title, since it instantly brought Pink Floyd to mind - and I can see that's no coincidence. You have very good taste in music.

[Ana B.]

an absolutely beautiful review, many thanks for the amazing words and compliments :)

[Misery]

Verses lightly tapping on the conscious mind, yet sinking deeply into the subconscious. Nicely composed, dear Ana.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Kevin :)

[Misery]

It's my delight to discover your creations.

[Jordan]

Sounds like someone trying to find their place in the world and trying to rise above the crowd. I'm assuming the Pink Floyd song is either completely unrelated, as it involves war rather than the universe, or in some way inspired this.

It's as long as it needs to be, a lot of people tend to drag things out past the point that they've said everything they had. Personally I like shorter because it makes me feel that there could be more to say, the thought of which creates a sort of mystery and meaning.

I really like the celestial imagery as well. The last bit makes it seem as if it's narrated by both a normal girl and a higher plane being.

I like it.

[Ana B.]

Yes, the song served rather as an inspiration ....
Thank you very much for the amazing review Kaiju :)

[Jordan]

Anytime :)

[ANTO]

All desire their own 'space'. Even the mighty galaxies drift away from one another. Sometimes the shift in relationships can only be measured using super senses.
They still share the same stellar DNA though.
I loved the use of 'convolved' here. Great word choice in a great write Ana.
:)

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much ANTO :) have a smashing evening.

[ANTO]

You're welcome and you have a great evening too my friend. :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have a family tie that I deny, but unfortunately it is still there...

j.

[Ana B.]

i hope it will work out Jacob.

[wordman]

well i hope we all can find it,a creative write

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Wordman :)

[wordman]

my pleasure ana