La belle dame

ruffling old pages.....

 

A black beauty is dancing

Amongst the cobalt tears…

Those tears demanding

Her affections so fierce…

 

Her wishes of quartz…

And dreams of aquamarine

Brighter than the stars

With their light pristine…

 

In her palace of moonshine

The beauty stays untouched

Because it’s hard to define

What have those tears washed…

 

Is it the light of the laughing stars?

Or the ashes of a dream…

Or maybe the invisible scars

Of a heartbreaking wince…

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a great poem. I like the way your rhymes aren't exactly regular. I like the way your message hints at this dark beauty, but leaving some space for us to imagine what her life might be like? I especially love the way you use a related series of descriptions with gems -- cobalt, quartz, aquamarine -- suggesting beauty & fragility & hardness. Fondly, Margie

[Ana B.]

This is a beautiful review. Thank you Margie :)

[Petar Oklobdzija]

beautifully pieced together. my only complaint is the use of the word "wince" to end it. It just didn't feel right to me. Other then that I felt it was a wonderful poem. well done!

[Ana B.]

Thank you Petar :)

[Tony Jordan]

You had me at 'cobalt tears' - fine writing Ana.
Such a plethora of great reviews - and rightly so - but a total injustice that it hasn't seen more exposure on the Top writing board because some people choose to cheat to get their pieces onto it :(

[Ana B.]

Thank you my dear friend :) It's okay, at least i know that after i leave this world, something will remain...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

The last stanza is really my favourite here. You always have a way with words to cast a vivid imagery, Ana. Lovely write :)

This line here,
'What have those tears washed…'
should be 'has', I think...

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Yumna :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Ana (:

[Abraham George]

one of the best magician showing tricks using words. that flow is nice and captivating.

[Ana B.]

Thank you Abraham :)

[Kesha]

I loved this piece, "beautiful lady" perfect title, I just adore the french language!

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Kesha :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

your poems are unique. its just too soothing...the flow...the words....

[Ana B.]

Thank you Anurag :)

[Amber]

I loved the play on words, it was magical and the blend of myth was a nice surprising. Very good job, hope to see more.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for this Amber :)

[Amber]

Your welcome, hope to see more from you.

[Rocans]

I already realize a trend in your poetry;they're characterized by strong imagery and metaphors. This one was no different. Nice read.

[Ana B.]

Thank you :)

[Damien Thibodeaux]

I am adrift on the dance and the tears and the want for something that can not be... This is a very artistic write that reminded me of the English poet/lyricist, Betty Thatcher. I enjoyed this very much.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Damien :)

[Damien Thibodeaux]

You're welcome.