Afternoon

You can have those mountains I gathered

On your doorstep, they’re all yours…

Because now my heart is flattered

And dreamy like Sting’s ‘’Desert Rose’’

 

A silent here, a noisy there

To melt the fortress around my heart

That compelling music sounding somewhere

Where this strange storm cannot wait to start…

 

So come sit here with me,

And guess the color of the rain

One hand resting on my knee

The other stroking my hair…again and again…

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Daisy]

wow wonderful and lovely... good job ana

[Ana B.]

Thank you Daisy :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the ending.
"So come sit here with me,
And guess the color of the rain
One hand resting on my knee
The other stroking my hair…again and again…"
Nice to relax with good company and know peace. Thank you Ana for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

Thank you dear John.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Ana.

[Dave]

Ana - I love the way you paint pictures in my mind. They are always so beautiful, so romantic.

[Ana B.]

:) Thank you a lot Dave, you are very kind.

[613]

This is very beautiful. I really enjoyed this!

- Brittney

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Brittney :)

[613]

You're welcome!

[Adam Adams]

"So come sit here with me... And guess the color of the rain.. " Beautiful poetry. Yes, color of rain and the pretty caramel color of love both divine into one thing which speaks through faithful spirits. I believe, rain's full of colors especially when you're in love with nature, but at the same time, it becomes as colorless as the drop of water when you're surrounded by the solitude of "love". It flatters along cold breezes... like the skies twinks alongwith sun and moon. Wonderful imagery. Liked it!

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much my friend :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
so so romantic............sweet..............beautiful.............
you write so beautifully.......like flowers......seriously....

"So come sit here with me,

And guess the color of the rain"

BRAVO!!!!
amazing as always...........
i loved it!!!
:)

[Ana B.]

:) thank you very much my dear

[Pushkar Prabhat]

always a pleasure..........!!! :) :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wispy feeling of romance and warmth in this one...especially like the last stanza...

"and guess the color of the rain"

wow, on that line....wish i had written that one.

[Ana B.]

Thank you my kind friend.

[Rana]

This is such a merry poem, so much like the heart singing away it's joy. The reference to Desert Rose adds to the beauty, as the tone of the two match. I loved the line "And guess the color of the rain". Beautiful.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Rana :)