Babylon

I’ve got one breath left. What to do with it….

From a whisper to a scream…one breath…

I’ve got this piece that doesn’t seem to fit

In this ocean with no bottom and no depth

 

Your heart’s a flicker to this flame…

A burning fire, heating me at night

Will I be able to stay sane…

When you promise to hold me tight?

 

Chasing snowflakes…again

Those who feel, can’t claim armistice

Chasing snowflakes…even in the rain…

Cause heart is war and love…a pacifist.

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyndy]

This is another piece of poem I love! Well written and keep up the good work! :D

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much dear Lyndy :)

[Gowan J. Volga]

I enjoyed your last line.

[Ana B.]

Thank you .

[Willis Walker]

A really powerful piece. All is fair in love and war and we are all soldiers of both. I particularly love the last stanza, as well as the use of ellipsis which to me construes a frustration involved with the emotions shown in this piece?

[Ana B.]

I'm glad you enjoyed it Willis, i am fond of ellipsis, don't think i have a poem without them....thank you

[KelWriter]

Perfectly captured in painfully beautiful words. Thanks for sharing this.

[Ana B.]

thank you for reading

[Ana D S M]

This is so beautifully written Ana. :)

[Ana B.]

thank you very much Lilith :)

[R Smith]

first stanza, brilliant, second, brilliant, third, brilliant, one quality writing of the highest level, you never cease to amaze Ana, a poet of our times and the future as well :)

[Ana B.]

And you never cease to make me smile Richard, thank you for your review :)

[AaronFreitas]

A very good poem Ana! I really enjoyed it :)

[Ana B.]

Thanks Aaron!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem.
"Chasing snowflakes…again
Those who feel, can’t claim armistice
Chasing snowflakes…even in the rain…
Cause heart is war and love…a pacifist."
People who know the true cost of war will become pacifist. Guns and bombs kill without caring if Muslim, Christian or any other belief. Thank you Ana for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

Thank you John for the outstanding comment, enjoy this beautiful day ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Ana. I went to three fellow soldiers friend funeral. I stood with the children of good friends. Taught me to hate war and the people making profit off death.

[Ana B.]

I understand what you mean, and i hope me and my (future) family will never know such things...

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too. I hope my grandchildren can live in a world where peace and concern is the way.

[Ana B.]

Let's pray and do everything for that ;)

[Saddam]

Will I be able to stay sane…
When you promise to hold me tight?

Brilliant as always and confessing the surrounding.
Great.

[Ana B.]

Thank you my dear for being so sweet :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the opposites in play here, and how they are complementing each other...the heat, the cold, the war, the pacifist...
love puts our heart at war...it is never all peace and calm---maybe the scream for the last breath is the smartest road. At least it lets out the pent up emotions, either way.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Jacob.

[Abilash Uttama]

consecutive description of flame and snowflake like arrival of war after love, liked it very much !

[Ana B.]

Thank you Abilash :)