Intersection

Let me love you in the morning

When the world is still childish

While my thoughts are still burning

with life… While I’m being selfish.

 

A lost hope is a wandering star

Waiting to be found…

When a memory is nothing but a scar

When the silence makes no sound….

 

Another woman at the horizon...

The blackest blasphemy…

And now my thoughts are full of poison

Because I know it’s not meant to be.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[ANTO]

This is a very good write Ana, the first stanza is to die for - again it alone could be one of those Wise tumblr posters
- the second I felt would be more in keeping with the rest of the poem if you had kept it as personal to the narrator as you did in the first and third stanzas with perhaps, 'My lost hope ..' instead of 'A lost hope'

- the third - what can i say but 'meeeeaaaiow' lol
Cool write Ana (love that name) !!!!

[Ana B.]

:) your words make me giddy lol, thank you for your suggestion my dear friend,
love your reviews ;)

[Deepika]

"When the silence makes no sound" This lined puzzled me initially! But when taken as a forerunner for the 'Lost hope', it gives a deep meaning! Good one:)

[Ana B.]

Thank you Deepika!

[NoelHC]

When that dream is taken from you by another is so painful, you have managed to put that into words very well.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Noel :)

[Daisy]

awesome and wonderful....... great job Ana B it's really wonderful

[Ana B.]

Thank you D , you're very sweet :)

[Cool Girl]

Omg!!!! This is so wonderful!! It's romantic yet sad... I loved it:)

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much dear :)

[Cool Girl]

You're Welcome!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow there is both bitterness and selfish delight mixed together in this incredible piece.
i know you are going to someone else, but for tonight, you are mine...so love me like there is no tomorrow.

[Ana B.]

yes well, sometimes even one night is enough.....

[R Smith]

wonderful poem Ana, sad that it comes to its end but a love that burns bright for a short time, your talent for writing is blossoming with every line you write, thank you so much :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you Richard for your sweet words, i always feel warm after reading your reviews. Thank you :)

[Lizardo]

This poem is really good!
"A lost hope is a wandering star"
Beautiful poem!

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the lovely words L :)

[Luna Zerimar]

Your poem is beautiful.

Rhyme and flow is great.

The last stanza. I loved.

It's so real. I can almost touch it. x

[Ana B.]

Thank you so much Jess :)

[Chris]

distinctive thoughts and emotional responses...

[Ana B.]

the responses are really unexpected....

[Saddam]

When a memory is nothing but a scar
When the silence makes no sound….

Wonderful write. Imagery are too strong. Beautiful write dear. I enjoyed reading it.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much dear.