Beautiful movement of words and thoughts.
"All these layers, fighting to be controlled
Never been bought, but I’m already sold.
Dancing all around for this allure
Surrounded in sludge, but feeling so pure."
The above lines are perfect. Feeling pure and content. A good place to be. Thank you dear Ana for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you dear John for always finding the right words :)
It's just Richard, a simple poet, a new fan.
Not often these days one comes across a poetry writer who composes in rhyme 'n rhythm and verses that speak in spells; yet, free from muddling ambiguity … so refreshing.
"Fascination" certainly embraces the true spirit and depth of feeling that love inspires in the heart and soul, as does your well-chosen, arranged syntax of beautiful words to sing in a breath ever-so softly, I imagine, unto all you've knowingly and wisely touched in most every romantic's ideal array of desires.
I hope, in my fervor, I've not too affluently overstated my appreciation and enjoyment of your excellent work.
Thank you, Ana, for your lovely blessing. ⁓ Richard 🍃
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Hi Richard :) Your words are very much inspiring and heart warming. Thank you!!!! Stay blessed
This poetry is beautiful and I tell you what, something happened and I started reading this in reverse. From last to first line, try that. You will sure be astound. Thank you!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
You are right! Amazing.... ha ha, thanks M :) i sure am astounded as well now....
Straight from the heart, which is great.
Its so deep, and beautiful.
I love your rhyming, its much better then mine, I hope to someday rhyme bigger words, and still make the poem flow and sound great like this piece.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I wouldn't worry if i were you :)
Thank you very much for the sweet words
"Looking out for this enticing caress
To know we’re not alone in loneliness..."
very compelling piece, your choice of words is nothing short of enticing...
I love the content and the sentiment and the text choice and colour here Ana. Loved the rhyming and the skilful use of assonance.
Only one part made me wonder about the semantics
"Restless in its glory…lovely in its spelling
Cause its existence is nothing if prevailing…" - I imagine you meant 'nothing if NOT prevailing'
perhaps a minor change e.g. -
"The existence of which is nothing if not prevailing"
Overall I got a true soul lift from the dedicated tone of this - who wouldn't want to be the muse to this great write? Well done Ana.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you my dear friend for the help :) my mistake. I'm very glad you liked it :)