Bittersweet

trying stuff....

Brave new world with the old sky

Sketching  vanilla dreams…

No dirty thoughts to purify

No  false notes on these golden strings.

We all are soldiers…some of war

Some of peace.

We all got sins to pay for

And good people to convince.

Floating above

Swimming underneath

Dreaming of love

Then watching in disbelief.

 

Reviews

[Saddam]

We all are soldiers…some of war
Some of peace.
We all got sins to pay for
And good people to convince.

yea, right. Beautiful write dear poet. like it very much.

[Ana B.]

thank you for liking it S :)

[R Smith]

lovely writing Ana, i get the feeling that each line kinda opposes the one or other before or after it as though the first line is the bad side of the next line which is the good side of the first line and so on through out the poem, maybe i just confused the hell out of everyone but its an amazing job to write such a poem, therefore i say you are an amazing poet but then i knew that already, are you still with me ? Great work Ana :)

[Ana B.]

:) yes I still am, thank you for the kindest review Richard, ha ha, I am pretty sure I had a more simple scheme for this poem.....but it turned out like this....

[R Smith]

i'm sure your poems are a lot more than just simple, they are great works of art, that's my opinion :)

[Ana B.]

I'm very glad you think so Richard, after all, they are one of my reflections....and i'm very flattered, being complemented by a great writer!

[R Smith]

who was that great writer!!..................oh ok i think you mean me lol thanks for such a compliment i don't feel great but if you think so then i must accept your word for it, thank you again Ana you're such a lovely person, glad your my friend :)

[Ana B.]

:) i'm glad of that as well lol, you're a very nice person.And talented :)

[R Smith]

'Ditto' :)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

Good choice of words, you definitely need a better title though :P

[Ana B.]

hmmm.....point for that.... i'll think about it :D thank you J :)

[Ana B.]

what do you think? better? :P

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

This is not the title it needs, this is the title it deserves (In batman voice:p lol)!!! nice:)

[Ana B.]

ghahha :D alright....time to check out your work :)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

geeeh... thanks:) That'd be lovely!!!

[armin]

wow ,what a great wise world that would be. Amazing thoughts.

armin. ...

[Ana B.]

Thank you Armin :) it would be indeed