Bittersweet

trying stuff....

Brave new world with the old sky

Sketching  vanilla dreams…

No dirty thoughts to purify

No  false notes on these golden strings.

We all are soldiers…some of war

Some of peace.

We all got sins to pay for

And good people to convince.

Floating above

Swimming underneath

Dreaming of love

Then watching in disbelief.

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a lot in the poetry.
"We all are soldiers…some of war
Some of peace."
Sins and bad actions. If we are lucky. We become kinder. I like the flow of thoughts leading to the very strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

Kindness should not fade with time.....
I thank you for all the kind words John :)

[Mayank]

I loved the last four lines, it was like a perfect end of the human thought process. We sit and watch the world in disbelief. Superb!

[Ana B.]

Indeed we do. Thank you very much for liking it !

[Levi Levin]

Great thought and an excellent poem!

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much for stopping by :)

[Confuser]

I enjoyed it and then bam - you knocked my socks of. Then watching in disbelief! Great writing as always.

[Ana B.]

eh.....what can I say....impulsive stays impulsive...thank you for stopping by Dale :)

[Confuser]

Hehehe.....You are wonderful writer!

[MsJewel]

Absolutely stunning in imagery. I love the entire feel of your poem and the last few lines are perfect. stunning, stunning writing.

:) Julie

[Ana B.]

:) Thank you very much Julie, for stopping by and the lovely review.

[Jennie Baron]

I haven't visited your work in a while and it's been my loss. I love your style of wording and your unique poetic voice. This one is absolutely beautiful in its natural flow. Wonderful poem!

[Ana B.]

I'm glad you stopped by Jennie, thank you very much for the kind words :)

[Moonie]

The eloquence, the beauty.....I'm in awe. I really love this. Great job! My favourite lines would be
"We all got sins to pay for
And good people to convince.
Floating above
Swimming underneath
Dreaming of love
Then watching in disbelief."

[Ana B.]

Thank you for such a praise my dear :)

[Matching Socks]

Well done Ana. Some very good lines and wisdom.

[Ana B.]

Thank you Ana :)

[anne]

I love this style of your writing...
No false notes on these golden strings.
We all are soldiers…some of war
Some of peace....so lovely..beautiful write dear..:))

[Ana B.]

ah thank you so much for the kind review dear :)

[Lizardo]

Wow this is really one great poem...
I really enjoyed it,Great work!

[Ana B.]

Thanks a lot :)