Winter

The velvet feeling of the snow - a perfect numbness

I stare in the mirror at the world's best actress.

Pale skin, large eyes....full of subtle lies

Maybe this winter will change and neutralize

 

All the vices of this fake grace...

Why do his words goad my self-distaste?

I hate it when someone has this power over me...

Let the snow wash away this bad version and set me free

 

If you leave....will I finally be cured?

Will the arms of my affinity become inured?

Drifting apart from the rest of the rest...

This door is forever closing of in my chest

 

Way to similar with my life going fever

And my heart -helplessly trying to endeavor

But I can't reach peace...just cumulated sinter

Only prolonging my sufferings till the next winter.

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[R Smith]

lovely Ana, the coldness of winter perfectly matches your tale of the coldness in a relationship gone bad, the quality of your writing has become excellent and your ability to tell a story is perfect, well done :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the wonderful words my dear :) I'm very glad you stopped by :)

[R Smith]

you are always welcome Ana, your new photo is stunning if you don't mind me saying :)

[Ana B.]

:) thank you Richard, i'm flattered

[Nene]

I love winters.... They seem mystical to me...
Thanks for sharing

[Ana B.]

thanks for reading :)

[Moonie]

Winter magic teamed up with your wonderful vocabulary...a sure treat, if you ask me..:)) my favourite lines would be
"Pale skin, large eyes....full of subtile lies

Maybe this winter will change and neutralise"

[Ana B.]

Thank you my dear for the sweet words :)

[Confuser]

Beautiful Ana: You nailed it so perfectly....uncertainty in relationship...oh how we change...biding our time...Great writing as always....

[Ana B.]

Thank you my dear friend, cute puppy btw :D

[Confuser]

You're welcome!!! OOOOOH, lovely - that dependency thing sticks: That's my baby Louie: but he's almost 7 now/he has long hair/he had just been groomed...TY sweet lovely friend....Dale

[Confuser]

STINKS NOT STICKS!!! NO Way......

[Ana B.]

ha ha, mine will be one and a half this month :) and i'm also found of my cat....peculiar creature that he is.....

[Confuser]

That's funny Ana....take care.....

[sereenaoutloud]

beautiful write. i love and miss the snowy winters!

[Ana B.]

Thank you dear :)

[Emily]

I just love your wording in this one!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[Ana B.]

Thanks Emily!

[Jamestown]

Wow, l will now call you "vocab" nickname. Terrific piece of work, flow, message,
all of it just great,thanks for sharing.

[Ana B.]

ghaha , thank you so much James, you're very kind :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked how you gave Winter a healing touch.
"Pale skin, large eyes....full of subtile lies
Maybe this winter will change and neutralise"
I do like Winter. The world can slow down and we can re-gather ourselves again. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to the sad ending. Hoping for healing in the next Winter. Thank you dear Ana for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

I also love winter. Its immaculate and flawless....a fairy tale.
Thank you for the sweet review John :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Ana.

[Saddam]

Beautifully exclaimed poem............ So rhythmic and poetic.

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much S :)

[Jack Kennedy]

The rhyme scheme is awesome, never heard of sinter which is cool to learn new words.

[Ana B.]

Thanks for stoping by and for liking my work Jack :)