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A Story by Alyssa Thralls
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Submission for Batesys Drabble Corner.

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"Skinny dipping" that's what he used to call it.  Dipping his biscotti in his morning espresso.   It always made her laugh when he said he was 'going skinny dipping'.  She had loved his way of making mundane things amusing or exciting.   She remembered this wistfully as she bounced her biscotti back and forth in her cup, no doubt over soaking it so it would crumble when she tried to bite it.   Biting back tears she lifted the cup to her lips, trying to drown the overwhelming agony of his absence in her heart.

© 2008 Alyssa Thralls


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Very good write, I definitely had a different perception of skinny dipping.

Posted 16 Years Ago


This drabble caused me so many problems! I liked it a lot. It's original. It says so much. I wanted this to be in my top three but I couldn't because of the word count. It had to be exactly 100 words. It was difficult for me but I decided that I was mainly going to judge the entries based on how efficient they were in their use of the word limit and on how well they used the prompt. This used the prompt amazingly but I couldn't award it anything because of the word count.

However I should be doing another drabble contest in the near future and I'd really like you to make a submission =)

Posted 16 Years Ago


Thanks a lot for the submission. Even though there are only two so far I'm very impressed with the original interpretations of skinny dipping.

I also really like the ambiguity here. There is an initially happiness, followed by the sting in the tail.

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Added on October 2, 2008

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Alyssa Thralls
Alyssa Thralls

Bolinas, CA



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I was born with a pen in my mouth and ink bottle on my pillow. I wrote my first short story at six and started writing my first novel at ten. At fourteen I was hit with the spirit of rock and roll .. more..